steady downpour . . .
cormorants on the snag
just the same


—Bill Waters
        

About the author: Bill Waters
Titusville, NJ
bnwaters at verizon.net

 

Responses to the haiku for 29 May 2003 by Bill Waters

  1.  
    2003-05-29 19:14:39
     

    Bill has a wonderfully light touch. I've been looking through his other haiku on tw and he has that gift of making it look effortless. His work is a lesson in avoiding an overwrought output where the words are more precious than the thought (all too common!)

    More like this please.

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  2.  
    Ellen G. Olinger (ElinGrace at wi dot rr dot com)
    2003-05-29 19:47:07
     

    I was just thinking the same thing--that the writing of this poem seems effortless. Natural language in form. Thanks, Bill.

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    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-06-03 23:26:32
     

    perchance, i should read some of bill's "other haiku".

    sorry, ellen and norman, i can't share your thoughts.

    is this a haiku, i find myself deliberating.

    is it me, or has a concept been lost, or perhaps the gems leaves one totally satisfied, without questions being raised, as to what's to come next.

    steady downpour . . .
    cormorants on the snag

    i saw this so vividly, especially with the duties
    of the cormorant being conceived.


    i feel as though something more tangible could have made this haiku memorable.

    case in point:

    steady downpour . . .
    cormorants on the snag
    fish need not worry...
    for the moment


    oh well, it's nice to have fun, just the same.

    can my point be understood...

  4.  
    john tiong chunghoo (bagiruang at yahoo dot com)
    2004-01-04 08:23:15
     

    downpour
    the pigeon dips and rises,
    dips and rises, splashing in a puddle

  5.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-06-21 18:44:10
     

    stillness -
    nary a leaf stirring
    duck skims through the humid air

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