blue sky
I almost miss
the morning glory

—kirsty karkow
        

Originally published in FROGPOND xxiv:2...in 2001. (The journal for the Haiku Society of America)

tinywords earlier attributed this haiku to another poet. we regret the error.

About the author: My name is kirsty karkow. My husband and I live on the coast of Maine, enjoying all that nature has to offer, including inspiration for haiku. My haiku have been fortunate enough to win prizes and be published in 5
countries: USA, Canada, Australia, Japan and Croatia.

 

Responses to the haiku for 6 June 2003 by kirsty karkow

  1.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-06-06 08:44:03
     

    i appear to be on a roll, "the usual", i hear echoed by my colleagues.

    "blue sky
    I almost miss"

    not surprising, i ask myself, "why are we to miss the blue sky...

    the first two lines together beg for more input.

    even though the third line fulfills the second line, the overall "haiku" seems a tad bit shaky.


    remake time.


    through the clouds, blue sky
    I almost miss
    the morning glory



    i ponder when some might steer from the haiku composed only of three lines, for a refresher, perhaps using two, four, or five lines...

  2.  
    Tod Claus (todd dot claus at us dot army dot mil)
    2003-06-06 09:52:51
     

    Your posts could be written by Ignatius J. Reilly, the hero of John Kennedy Toole’s brilliant novel, Confederacy of Dunces. They are thoughtful and reflective and show a delusion and self-absorption that might be endearing if they weren’t so intellectually oafish. Your comments on haiku, like Reilly’s on life, tend to be little more than melodramatic rants (except yours are without the benefit of plot, or even a central theme) that tend to be more of a demonstration of psychasthenia than constructive criticism.

    You did say one thing once that made sense. You said, “some things exist, only, within the frameworks of one's mind.” I only wish those things included your comments on haiku.

  3.  
    Norman Darlington
    2003-06-06 15:22:42
     

    Seems Santa came early to bob.
    Psycha-what?
    Psychasthenia!

  4.  
    Todd Claus
    2003-06-06 15:56:01
     

    It just seems to fit, doesn't it?

  5.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-06-06 17:27:12
     

    todd, instead of REFLECTING on my words, i'd hope some insight on your work would be forthcoming.

    indeed, if it's worthiness was demeaned, and some form of injury was felt by the creator, defending of it secrets would be justifiable, rather than the author becoming offended, without putting up much of a fight as to what made it worthwhile, even though it being short, i took the time to read it.

    tis a pity. even in my creations i wince at negative criticism, however, upon REFLECTION, i see it as being constructive; just as your words of belittlement made my day.

    of late, i've noticed a superficial appreciation of literary. few taking the time to get to the gist of the matter, while proclaiming the greatness of what was being absorbed, or lack there-of.

    i found myself laughing along with norman, his santa comment. very good norman, i trust more of your wit is on the way.

    back to the matter at hand, i'll deal with my buddy, norman, later.

  6.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-06-06 17:30:52
     

    yes, of course, there is a continuation...

    in REFLECTING, excuse the puns, on a previous comment, my mentioning if one takes the time to write what comes to mind, there is always someone who will take the time to read it, as apparently a few read my words today, regardless of their value, or lack of.

    rather than, in a feeble way, trying to be insulted by my words, todd, counter them by producing more insight as to what you're trying to say, since i, in my ineptness, as i am the first to admit, have missed the point.

    todd, for all your amusing descriptive words on my intellect, remember my opinion is just that, "mine", as yours are yours.

    in sincerity, todd, i think your time may have been better served explaining your haiku in some detail as opposed to winging it on who the buffoon in posting might be.

  7.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-06-06 17:36:27
     

    continuing...

    while awaiting your response, i believe i may have struck a nerve, todd. first and foremost, my postings are never meant to be taken as you apparently took it, degrading, depreciating, undervaluing, scornful, however i must admit, i apparently misunderstood your creation.

    you must admit, i saw things differently than you, however it was your moment.

    i am pleased you found something profound in my words, todd; "some things exist, only, within the frameworks of one's mind".

    thank you...

  8.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-06-06 17:48:26
     

    the thought comes to me, were you referring to the flower, the morning-glory, todd.
    see, without your assistance i am still trying to understand.

    for lack of a word or even something as minor as a punctuation mark, the thought can be misplaced...


    i admit, you have latched onto something worthy, however, in need of fine-tuning...

  9.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-06-06 18:02:22
     

    norman,

    psychasthenia:

    a neurotic state characterized especially by
    obsessions, or phobias, or compulsions that "one knows" are irrational.

    however, i believe todd's usage as being incorrect, or is he being so kind in assuming i know better, if indeed he is referring to me.

    food for thought...

  10.  
    john tiong chunghoo
    2003-12-31 23:01:45
     

    beach wind
    his refusal to believe
    he has cancer

  11.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-06-21 20:18:03
     

    hand-in-hand
    a walk in the rain --
    i almost missed her tears

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