Waves upon the shore
children playing at the beach--
waves upon the shore


—George Carvalho
        

 

Responses to the haiku for 23 June 2003 by George Carvalho

  1.  
    2003-06-23 14:13:57
     

    Very nice. The repetition of the first and last lines shows well the never-ending waves of the ocean. I can hear the laughter and yells of the kids, the screeching of the gulls circling, and my back burning a deeper red... :)

    Thanks.

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    2003-06-23 16:02:07
     

    This is very vivid, although I must confess I'm not entirely at ease with the verbatim repetition of lines.

    George, although you live in California, I think your name is Portuguese in origin. It's an interesting coincidence for me, that the memory this haiku calls up, dates back to time in Portugal years back. Near Lisbon, on a pebble beach in a place called Cascaís (pronounced 'Cash-ca-ish') the gentle swell of the Atlantic repeatedly echoed the name of the place -- cash-ca-ish, cash-ca-ish -- while Lisbon's children played.

    Thanks for the reminder, George.

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    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-06-23 21:50:57
     

    "i think" i know what george is trying to say and, it may not be a repetition of phrases, i think.

    i think it's more representing of the children waving from the shore; i think.

    phil, the waves may be never ending, therefore, i think this is an extended moment we are romancing.

    i think, it may have been better structured if said:

    wave upon the shore
    children at play on the beach---
    wave from the shore

    what do you think?

    i think, this adds to the back and forth movement of most things in nature.

    george, i enjoyed your presentation, however norman's reminiscing gives me cause to move in retrospect to florida's many beaches and how each one seemingly has a personality of it's own; while being an avid scuba diver, the crescendo of the waves, especially during the nights, always give rise to thoughts of another time, another place, not necessarily relating to the beach.

    norman, what do you think?

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    john tiong chunghoo (bagiruang at yahoo dot com)
    2003-12-18 02:56:57
     

    the rolling waves
    one upon the other
    my heart affluttered

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    Carole Simon
    2004-01-07 16:24:58
     

    Mimi is looking for George De Carvalho who lived in San Francisco. He must be around 70 or 80 years old. He writes books.
    She is very old and would like to have news from him before she leaves the earth.
    She was from Paris. Now in Canada.

  6.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-06-22 20:48:40
     

    screams fill the air
    ferris wheel spinning --
    the air filled with screams

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