a butterfly pair
follows the young couple
along the boardwalk


—Curtis Dunlap
        

The above haiku was witnessed at Myrtle Beach, S.C. last October.

About the author: My name is Curtis Dunlap. I'm a webmaster by trade but aspire to be a better haiku poet. I live in Mayodan, NC (where the Mayo and the Dan rivers meet). I've been married almost 20 years to my wife Jane. We have three children and one crazy dog.

Web site: haiku and haibun from tobacco road

 

Responses to the haiku for 30 June 2003 by Curtis Dunlap

  1.  
    paul m.
    2003-06-30 17:21:15
     

    I like the comparison of the butterflies to the young couple. Each gains from the other, especially in season. However, I prefer a haiku with a strong break, and this reads as one sentence.

  2.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-06-30 23:22:52
     

    i am amazed at the addition of the words "a" and "the" and what they can do to an otherwise great haiku.

    case in point:


    along boardwalk
    butterfly pair...

    follows young couple



    great job, curtis, in capturing the moment.

  3.  
    cornelius (cornelius at entermail dot net)
    2003-07-01 04:09:56
     

    yeah-but who cares?

  4.  
    Ellen G. Olinger (ElinGrace at wi dot rr dot com)
    2003-07-02 08:40:28
     

    Hi Curtis,

    I've been married 30 years and like this poem, as the butterfly is a symbol of new life, of the way love needs to be renewed to last. A poem of blessing. I remember being the young couple, but like middle-age much better! I also think the poem needs a little more work, since it reads like a sentence. I have a lot of work "resting" now and trust I'll know what to do later on. Or something will occur to me when I'm thinking about something else...

    Best wishes to you and your family, Ellen

  5.  
    john tiong chunghoo
    2003-12-31 22:47:48
     

    flower garden
    all that buzz
    and colourful dancers

  6.  
    Brad Speaks
    2004-01-02 23:27:53
     

    Hi Curtis,

    I wonder if you lived in Japan in 1969 and were in Mrs. Story's class at ASIJ (American School in Japan). If so, please contact me. My email is bspeaks1@comcast.net.

    Brad

  7.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-06-26 04:09:24
     

    day's beginning
    duck and brood of ten ...
    alone, i walk

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