street sweeper
showering the pavement, fragrance
of summer rain


—Debi Bender
        

About the author: D.W. Bender (lacewing at paperlanterns.net) is Development Advisor for the World Haiku Club and the Editor-in-Chief of its online magazine, the World Haiku Review. Her personal website is Paper Lanterns. An artist and poet, Debi lives in Orlando, Florida, USA.

 

Responses to the haiku for 1 July 2003 by Debi Bender

  1.  
    paul m.
    2003-07-01 18:36:57
     

    This is an interesting poem (although the shape is a bit jarring). A street sweeper revives memories of a summer rain through the same wet pavement smell. An original, and surprising pairing!

  2.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-07-03 06:12:58
     

    debi, another haiku moment has been captured.

    i, too, pondered your structuring.
    i read this piece several times, thinking i should leave well enough alone, however it beckoned me, akin to that first sip of cooling water on an arid day, to make some form of comment;

    would a little more condensation have worked as well.

    case in point:

    street sweeper...
    showering pavement
    fragrance, summer rain

  3.  
    Debi (dmine at mpinet dot com)
    2003-08-03 00:00:00
     

    no

  4.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-08-09 14:44:20
     

    debi, since you have had time to re-evaluate your position, possibly you have changed your answer...

  5.  
    Debi
    2003-08-10 23:21:16
     

    no

  6.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-08-11 13:31:15
     

    "no", was her response; not once, but twice
    debi, what are you trying to say


    are you dissenting
    exactly, what is your "no" representing


    is this a refusal
    or perchance, of my words, you are a peruser


    what if, instead, i'd asked her for a dance
    "no..."

  7.  
    john tiong chunghoo
    2003-12-31 22:45:34
     

    floral scent
    after the noon rain
    my inching libido

  8.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-06-26 04:29:43
     

    summer morn
    sweeping her door steps ...
    shower fresh, fragrance

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