red pennant
snapping in the breeze
lifeguard's whistle


—Bill Waters
        

About the author: Bill Waters
Titusville, NJ
bnwaters at verizon.net

 

Responses to the haiku for 3 July 2003 by Bill Waters

  1.  
    Craig McLanachan (cramar at actrix dot co dot nz)
    2003-07-04 00:30:21
     

    Very nice work.A lot to think about given all the many possibilities and the sound of the whistle.Makes you sit up and take notice. Well done.

  2.  
    Kathy Mann
    2003-07-04 10:00:42
     

    Well balanced. It seems to come together effortlessly, to form a perfect, and memorable beach moment. Thanks.

  3.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-07-12 08:34:15
     

    i have always been of the frame of mind, if one makes a suggestion, then one feels something could have been does better

    from bob's book of rules, number 14...

    bill, your piece is nice

    however, it could have been nicer, for me, if it had gone along these lines:


    lifeguard's whistle...
    red pennant
    snapping in the breeze


    i feel the whistle would have been the first attention getter, this being because i live in a beach area, where one's attention is divided by God's gift to man...

  4.  
    john tiong chunghoo
    2003-12-31 22:42:49
     

    promotion
    he talks and walks
    in boss's style

  5.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-06-26 20:02:27
     

    around midnight -
    rumbling locomotive
    accelerating

    -

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