hawk on an updraft
  showing me how
  to relax


—Margarita Engle
        

About the author: Margarita Engle (Englefam at Earthlink.net) is the author, most recently, of The Poet Slave of Cuba: A Biography of Juan Francisco Manzano (Henry Holt & Co., 2006). Word Wings (Elin Grace Publ.) is a collection of haiku and short poems for children.

She is also the author of two novels as well as shorter works selected for anthologies and literary journals in many countries, in several languages. She has won numerous literary awards.



 

Responses to the haiku for 11 July 2003 by Margarita Engle

  1.  
    Craig McLanachan (cramar at actrix dot co dot nz)
    2003-07-11 21:38:38
     

    I think your haiku works very well in the tradition of the masters who linked themselves to nature. This is, for me, one of the most rewarding sides of good haiku writing.

  2.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-07-12 08:21:04
     

    a nice image in your first line, margarita.

    however, the second line lacks juxtapose, we seemingly have what some term "cause and effect".

    then all together, we have "verbal phrasing".

    may i suggest, and though your piece has been printed, by no mean am i inferring a remake, as many think my comments indicate, simply food for thought:


    hawk on an updraft

    warm shower to relax me
    from a trying day


    the first line, one thinks has nothing to do with the second and third lines, yet it does set the stage for reading between the lines that follow.

    i must agree with craig, if only in "the rewards of a good haiku", to this i add, my thinking, "wow, this feels good to me, and it's so thought provoking".
    a good haiku leaves me with the same feelings as a sip from a glass of cabernet, hmmm, say something from the mid-seventies


    now, if i can get an explanation from craig, as to what a good haiku does for him...

  3.  
    Ellen G. Olinger (ElinGrace at wi dot rr dot com)
    2003-07-13 09:44:19
     

    Thank you, Margarita. I sure need to learn this too. Also, I like the way you indent the second and third lines in your poems. Simple and lovely and clear. Blessings, Ellen

  4.  
    john tiong chunghoo
    2003-12-31 22:25:19
     

    sweet job
    butterfly
    and bees

  5.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-06-27 13:30:43
     

    summer heat-wave
    thermal updrafts --
    nary a raptor in the sky

  6.  
    ed markowski (1elmarko at comcast dot net)
    2004-08-28 14:25:59
     

    well done. your work is exemplary.

    marsh mist
    mallards drift
    with a fiberglass decoy

  7.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2005-01-02 20:28:14
     

    holiday weekend
    cat naps ...
    winding down

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