over the rise
most likely
more goldenrod


—Charles Trumbull
        

Previously published in Snapshots 6 (April 1999)

About the author: Charles Trumbull is an editor for Encyclopaedia Britannica and lives in Evanston, Illinois. He has been writing haiku since 1991. He was editor (1996-2002) of the Haiku Society of America Newsletter, president of the HSA in 2004 and 2005, and an organizer of the Haiku North America 1999 conference. He is currently editor of Modern Haiku and proprietor of Deep North Press, a publisher of haiku books.

No Web page yet; e-mail: trumbullc at comcast dot net

 

Responses to the haiku for 16 July 2003 by Charles Trumbull

  1.  
    2003-07-16 02:40:02
     

    and sheep
    shorn
      on this side anyway

    I guess without this inclination to mentally fill in the blanks we'd all be paralysed with uncertainty! I really like this haiku Charles, it's wonderfully vivid.

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    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-07-16 07:21:43
     

    good morning norm,
    you are quite right, this piece is rather vague.
    in reading it, i was feeling there was more to come, but surely not for it to be left to my imagery.
    it lacks conciseness. there is a hint of juxtapose, as i began wondering what was on the other side, a rather suspenseful moment at best.

    a little mystery in a haiku is acceptable, however not to the point of leaving the reader completely at a lost, nor the mystery being preponderate nor predominate of all else.

  3.  
    john tiong chunghoo
    2003-12-31 22:16:21
     

    new man
    in the house
    teenage son's cracked voice

  4.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-06-27 14:18:40
     

    in front of me --
    green mat of grass
    buttercups blend
    on the rise

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