crash
the bicycle wheel
still spinning


—Barry Goodmann
        

About the author: Barry Goodmann (bgoodmann at aol.com) is a poet, writer and editor who lives in the New York metropolitan area. He has published poetry on several websites and in various literary magazines.

 

Responses to the haiku for 6 August 2003 by Barry Goodmann

  1.  
    Ellen G. Olinger (ElinGrace at wi dot rr dot com)
    2003-08-06 07:13:43
     

    Thank you, Barry. It's so true that events take awhile to settle down. I don't move forward as fast as other people do. My mind keeps spinning after the crash. This is just off the top of my head: haiku helps with present-tense focus, but also with the multiple layers of meaning, that bring back the past and hopefully point to a better future. Perhaps not an easier future, but a deeper life. Poetry settles the mind and heart, even as it expands everything. Brings peace...however gradually.

    Blessings, Ellen

  2.  
    todd claus
    2003-08-06 10:50:16
     

    "haiku helps with present-tense focus, but also with the multiple layers of meaning, that bring back the past and hopefully point to a better future. Perhaps not an easier future, but a deeper life. Poetry settles the mind and heart, even as it expands everything. Brings peace...however gradually."

    This is good, Ellen. Thanks.

  3.  
    2003-08-06 14:18:07
     

    Ouch! I can feel this one. Which was the point, I think....

  4.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-08-07 01:28:13
     

    at first, i was not going to comment; then i read the piece again, and even for a fourth time, and i was somewhat troubled.

    "crash
    the bicycle wheel
    still spinning"

    i could not see a turning point but a continuation, as pointed out indirectly by ellen.


    leaving the piece intact, word wise, perhaps arranged slightly different:

    crash...
    still spinning
    the bicycle's wheel


    oh well, the things i see slightly different.

    it is still a nice piece, barry...

  5.  
    Ellen G. Olinger (ElinGrace at wi dot rr dot com)
    2003-08-07 21:12:21
     

    Thank you, todd.

  6.  
    bob richrdson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-07-04 05:15:00
     

    deformed limb -
    the blue jay
    still flying

    -

    contentment
    settling on what you have --

    room for improvement

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