summer fun
folds up in a truck--
ferris wheel

—Margaret Hehman-Smith
        

About the author: Margaret Hehman-Smith, margaret at hehmansmith-artwork.com

The author is a member of the Southern California Haiku Study Group (socalhaiku@yahoogroups.com). Margaret's first haiku chapbook, "Dedicated to Abandoned Animals," is now available at American Haiku Archives, Cal State Library, 900 N Street, Sacramento, California. Her drawings in the book are of animals she rescued.

 

Responses to the haiku for 18 August 2003 by Margaret Hehman-Smith

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    Craig McLanachan (cramar at actrix dot co dot nz)
    2003-08-18 20:37:39
     

    This one is worth pondering over. It is well seen and a little sad to think summer has past. It works well for me Margaret, is more of your work online?

  2.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-08-18 22:39:25
     

    "i don't know if i've
    settled down or not but I'm
    not moving for now


    if it's worth reading
    once it's worth reading twice so
    You know where to start"


    haiku/haikus by

    charles henri ford

    i used charles, not to indicate he's on my "best read list", merely to show how others think.

    now, that's a funny thing.



    "the challenge of haiku is to put the poem's meaning and imagery in the reader's mind in only seventeen syllables"

    "themes include nature, feelings, or experiences; usually they use simple words and grammar"



    i have read the haiku presented in many forms, some thinking if it follows the structuring it's a haiku, yet, i wonder where's the substance.

    "substance", i like the theology application:
    "that in which the divine attributes inhere"



    it's when i read the masters, of old, am i moved. as the trite saying goes, "they make it seem so easy, and it's fulfilling".



    more...

  3.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-08-18 22:50:13
     

    in addition to...

    reading others' work, they can cause you to grow, especially when you spot the (do)s and (don't)s

    i can appreciate margaret's words, in my teen years, i worked with a carnival, operating the rides.
    i watched the rides being assembled and dismantled, but never thought it to be fun; along with the riders becoming sick

    in spite of all this, there was always the laughter




    at first, i was rather perplexed in reading margaret's creation; prior to reading craig's comment, "...pondering over. it is well seen...", then, there was something for me to make a comparison to.



    there's more i want to say about margaret's haiku, but not on this outing

  4.  
    Ellen G. Olinger (ElinGrace at wi dot rr dot com)
    2003-08-19 07:37:30
     

    Thank you, Margaret. I just read your other haiku on tinywords and will reread them. "Summer twilight" is a nice complement to today's work.

    In this poem, the first two lines cause the reader to wonder what is being experienced, and the third line answers. I'm going to try this with moments recorded in my practice notebooks. By continuing to read, I'll know when an observation becomes a poem.

    Stepping off
    the merry-go-round
    resignation

  5.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-08-20 06:39:57
     

    a funny thought:

    i pondered "passive, accepting, uncomplaining, along with composed, being the next ones in line"

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