maybe a dozen
so I eat them slowly,
black raspberries


—Charles Trumbull
        

About the author: Charles Trumbull is an editor for Encyclopaedia Britannica and lives in Evanston, Illinois. He has been writing haiku since 1991. He was editor (1996-2002) of the Haiku Society of America Newsletter, president of the HSA in 2004 and 2005, and an organizer of the Haiku North America 1999 conference. He is currently editor of Modern Haiku and proprietor of Deep North Press, a publisher of haiku books.

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Responses to the haiku for 26 August 2003 by Charles Trumbull

  1.  
    Mark Eugeno (PatuissetIsland at aol dot com)
    2003-08-26 17:33:55
     

    maybe a dozen
    so I eat them slowly,
    black raspberries

    Ah yes, to savor the first black raspberries to ripen and knowing that in a few days there would be an explosion of them, ready for a noontime snack. Thanks Charles for awaking that sleeping picture in my mind

  2.  
    NJ
    2003-08-27 00:32:00
     

    I enjoyed this poem. The vibe reminded me a little of "This Is Just to Say" by William Carlos Williams:

    I have eaten
    the plums
    that were in
    the icebox

    and which
    you were probably
    saving
    for breakfast

    Forgive me
    they were delicious
    so sweet
    and so cold

  3.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-09-07 21:19:15
     

    of late, i tend to see deeper than what's on the surface.
    focusing on a comment of mine, recently, "life is but a dream"

    "maybe a dozen"

    for some reason, i thought, "maybe not"; conceivably "wishful thinking". whatever we have in life, there's this desire for more. straying for a moment, what's the saying, "for lack of a nail..., the horse was lost".
    this being said, perhaps there were quite a bit fewer than a dozen, but in one's eyes we pretend, if only for the moment.

    "so I eat them slowly,"

    allowing the taste to magnify more in one's mind, eating each (one) of (the few) as though it would be totally filling.
    thinking "digest", could we be systematically arranging this "food for thought" to a higher degree, yes, to actually experience the moment, word by word.


    "black raspberries"

    ah yes, "(a) rose by any other name is still (a) rose"

    i'll end on this note, as i savor (a) tasty morsel

  4.  
    martin
    2003-09-15 01:16:20
     

    wasp
    the black raspberries' stubble
    tickles my fingers

  5.  
    john tiong chunghoo
    2003-12-29 04:48:58
     

    wild Borneo berries
    waiting to see
    if the birds eat them

  6.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at web dot net)
    2004-07-17 18:49:28
     

    golden mango
    skin removed --
    the white worm's small appetite

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