my old school
the water fountain 
much too low


—Barry Goodmann
        

This poem was previously published in Humerus.

About the author: Barry Goodmann (bgoodmann at aol.com) is a poet, writer and editor who lives in the New York metropolitan area. He has published poetry on several websites and in various literary magazines.

 

Responses to the haiku for 27 August 2003 by Barry Goodmann

  1.  
    yoshi
    2003-08-29 00:37:59
     

    This is an interesting senryu--a humorous or satirical haiku. The image that comes to mind is someone visiting his old elementary school and trying to get a drink of water in the hall and having to stoop quite a bit. It's an amusing image. Yet I think it could also touch on the poet's feeling that his schooling (or old school) has not provided him with all the knowledge he ideally would like to have. There is a search for more insight, a higher font of wisdom. I imagine that other interpretations could be made as well.

  2.  
    Ellen G. Olinger (ElinGrace at wi dot rr dot com)
    2003-08-31 07:58:01
     

    A good picture of how our experiences of proportion change.

    So many years ago:
    the days I thought
    I'd never get through

    I also like yoshi's comments about the limitations of schooling and the search for a "higher font of wisdom."

    By the way, I visited my elementary school when grown. My first grade teacher recognized me the second she saw me!

  3.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-09-07 21:43:42
     

    sorry, barry, at times i give my mind too free-a-rein.

    so humor me for (a) moment.

    "my old school"

    i readily related to your first line.

    "the water fountain"

    (at times), having a stickler for syntax, i am reminded of the (dangling participle)
    i, for an instant, saw the water fountain as being the location of the school, though i am sure we have a contrasting point, here.


    "much too low"

    rather than height, as i am sure was your intention, i perceived (water level)

    barry, give me a day or two to gather my composure, enabling my thoughts to drift in the direction as perceived by yoshi and ellen

  4.  
    martin
    2003-09-15 01:01:03
     

    hallway
    the taste of sunflower seeds
    from the fountain

    Ayone want to renga here?

  5.  
    john tiong chunghoo
    2003-12-29 04:47:10
     

    sweet old days
    sick old grandma
    shouting for cola

  6.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-07-17 19:04:17
     

    after all these years --
    old school walls need new paint
    hallway still smells the same

    -

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