after the bang -
on the lake surface
falls dead silence


—Jasminka Nadaskic Diordievic
        

About the author: Jasminka Nadaskic Diordievic
Smederevo, Yugoslavia
e-mail: dior at sezampro.yu

I am from Yugoslavia. Computers (any kind of computers), poetry, haiku, art photography, mountain climbing ... it is my orientation. Professionally, I am an electrical engineer, but my soul is primarily a little piece of Nature.

Responses to the haiku for 26 September 2003 by Jasminka Nadaskic Diordievic

  1.  
    Michael L Evans (trailermike at charter dot net)
    2003-09-26 15:46:50
     

    Jasminka: I REALLY like this haiku!
    Think I would like it even more if
    it were in natural syntax. For example:

    after the bang -
    dead silence falls
    on the lake surface

    Probably just a matter of style.

    Michael L. Evans

  2.  
    Martine Joseph
    2003-09-26 23:43:09
     

    Thank you, Jasminka! This haiku is a genuine "moment." Perfect as is. One can hear the sound and the silence.

  3.  
    martin
    2003-09-27 07:00:01
     

    autumn dusk
    treetops stir in the silence

    Two days before the posting by Jasminka Nadaskic Diordievic, I had a strange experience waiting for the commuter train at the station. There’s something about the autumn dusk...

  4.  
    Ellen G. Olinger (ElinGrace at wi dot rr dot com)
    2003-09-27 07:15:36
     

    Yes, captures the moment exactly. I saw a wounded bird on the beach last fall--an arrow in its wing, but of course after what happened to it, I looked like a predator and was not allowed to help. When I came back, the bird was gone.

  5.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-09-28 00:18:39
     

    so still-
    lake's mirrored images
    evergreens, clouds, and the blue sky

  6.  
    Gillena Cox (bgeecee at wow dot net)
    2003-09-29 09:44:13
     

    Simply marvellous: this recorded moment of contrast, the noise, into the silence absorbed; its like watching firework appear, cascade and disappear in the night sky.

  7.  
    Norman Darlington (tinywords at eirmode dot com)
    2003-09-30 02:14:57
     

    Wonderful Jasminka!

    A difficult moment it's a capture to - when the echo of the bang bouncing around is, then made than ever deeper the silence.

    Or would it have been just that bit better in natural syntax? Beautiful nonetheless.

  8.  
    Elaine Cleveland (ecwriter at earthlink dot net)
    2003-10-17 07:36:14
     

    Your haiku is just so right.

    The silence would be intense!

    Elaine

  9.  
    john tiong chunghoo
    2003-12-05 08:58:00
     

    croc-infested river
    the overwhelming calm
    after the buffalo splash

  10.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-07-20 17:41:50
     

    old grey house -
    so cold, and empty
    silence

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