blue smoke travels
down the red rock canyon--
echo of a train

—Margaret Hehman-Smith
        

Previously published in Haiku Headlines, November 2002.

About the author: Margaret Hehman-Smith, margaret at hehmansmith-artwork.com

The author is a member of the Southern California Haiku Study Group (socalhaiku@yahoogroups.com). Margaret's first haiku chapbook, "Dedicated to Abandoned Animals," is now available at American Haiku Archives, Cal State Library, 900 N Street, Sacramento, California. Her drawings in the book are of animals she rescued.

 

Responses to the haiku for 9 October 2003 by Margaret Hehman-Smith

  1.  
    Michael L. Evans (trailermike at charter dot net)
    2003-10-09 20:06:57
     

    Margaret: I like this. Very visual - could
    be a painting. Also like the juxtaposition
    of sight & sound.

  2.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-10-09 23:08:24
     

    hellooooo
    were you talking to me...
    an echo

  3.  
    Elbert Pruitt
    2003-10-09 23:19:32
     

    -a beautifully phrased poem filling the mind with sound, color, and the interesting concept of smoke traveling down. I enjoy how "train" appears as the caboose of the poem, trailing a small segment of train-like rhythm. Nicely written!

  4.  
    john tiong chunghoo
    2003-12-27 07:53:14
     

    morn
    mist descends
    on the road like milk

  5.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-07-21 19:12:30
     

    black-grey clouds -
    after the summer storm
    commuter traffic-jam

    -

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