blue smoke travels
down the red rock canyon--
echo of a train

—Margaret Hehman-Smith

Previously published in Haiku Headlines, November 2002.

About the author: Margaret Hehman-Smith, margaret at

The author is a member of the Southern California Haiku Study Group ( Margaret's first haiku chapbook, "Dedicated to Abandoned Animals," is now available at American Haiku Archives, Cal State Library, 900 N Street, Sacramento, California. Her drawings in the book are of animals she rescued.


Responses to the haiku for 9 October 2003 by Margaret Hehman-Smith

    Michael L. Evans (trailermike at charter dot net)
    2003-10-09 20:06:57

    Margaret: I like this. Very visual - could
    be a painting. Also like the juxtaposition
    of sight & sound.

    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2003-10-09 23:08:24

    were you talking to me...
    an echo

    Elbert Pruitt
    2003-10-09 23:19:32

    -a beautifully phrased poem filling the mind with sound, color, and the interesting concept of smoke traveling down. I enjoy how "train" appears as the caboose of the poem, trailing a small segment of train-like rhythm. Nicely written!

    john tiong chunghoo
    2003-12-27 07:53:14

    mist descends
    on the road like milk

    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-07-21 19:12:30

    black-grey clouds -
    after the summer storm
    commuter traffic-jam