a little sick today,
several geese clear the mountain
before I count them

—Andrew Grossman
        

About the author: Andrew Grossman began the poetry database at www.poeticcopy.com to realize his goal of using poetry to communicate understanding, peace and caring among people of different religious, cultural and lifestyle beliefs. The unity between humanity and nature is for him the template for creating unity among all humanity.

Responses to the haiku for 13 January 2004 by Andrew Grossman

  1.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-01-13 01:34:03
     

    mot__ sign
    registration desk -
    spring's reflection in her eyes
    -
    stagnant water
    on the shore --
    bream gulps for air
    -
    clouds billowing
    darkening skies ...
    my thoughts of her passing
    -

  2.  
    Ellen G. Olinger (ElinGrace at wi dot rr dot com)
    2004-01-13 13:20:54
     

    The comma is exactly right: illness brings a pause. A new perspective. Now I am helping to care for another, who still helps so many. My hardest days are a strange and wonderful support for this new time.

  3.  
    H. Gene Murtha (Genemurt at cs dot com)
    2004-01-13 19:09:12
     

    I'd drop "a little,' in L1, in L2, "several,'
    sounds redundent since "geese," is pludal, how about:

    sick today,
    geese clear the mountain
    while I count them

    best,

    Gene

  4.  
    Mark Eugenio (PatuissetIsland at aol dot com)
    2004-01-13 23:02:27
     

    seven feathered friends
    waddle road before me
    honking, u-p--t-h-e-y---f--l--e--w

  5.  
    Dirk van Nouhuys (DHvN at wandd dot com)
    2004-01-14 00:58:45
     

    Moving and personal. Are these geese rated to Yate’s swans?

  6.  
    john tiong chunghoo (bagiruang at yahoo dot com)
    2004-01-14 06:51:00
     

    morning walk
    the therapeutic mist
    shrouding the mountain

  7.  
    2004-01-14 12:40:37
     

    Tilted towards clouds
    Face being washed by the rain
    Cleansing to my soul.

  8.  
    B J (rwjaye4u at yahoo dot com)
    2004-01-26 23:43:27
     

    When I opened Beth Rankin Cambell's Haiku and clicked on her blue printed name, a porno site called Barney's Homepage appeared. Why? Why is porno on this poetry site? Whoever is doing this, is a sicko.

  9.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-08-02 19:43:21
     

    grey skies, no break
    where pale moon was, yesterday ...
    her resounding goodbye

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