winter gale
drawing the haiku boulder
without light or shade

—Patricia Prime
        

About the author: Patricia has recently retired from teaching after 30 years, and now devotes some time to the reading recovery programme at her local school. She is the co-editor of the New Zealand haiku magazine Kokako and reviews editor of the online magazine Stylus. She writes short stories, poetry, reviews and articles, and likes to write collaborative poems with other poets.

Contact Patricia: pprime at ihug.co.nz.

Responses to the haiku for 28 January 2004 by Patricia Prime

  1.  
    Marjo in San Francisco (marjosfo at earthlink dot net)
    2004-01-28 01:13:52
     

    haiku art -
    colorful words
    realistic, yet abstract

  2.  
    martin
    2004-01-28 15:20:40
     

    dust devils
    the pink sky darkens on Gusev Crater

  3.  
    Mark Eugenio (PatuissetIsland at aol dot com)
    2004-01-28 16:24:47
     

    pen with black ink
    atoms of words and pictures
    to paper they wed

    brush and sumi touch
    spring grown paper of true hemp-
    sketch of patricia

    i make my ink thick
    to paint a picture of you
    lonley winter night

  4.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-01-28 22:33:20
     

    winter gale -
    my chest begins to swell

    drawing the haiku boulder -
    i look over your shoulder

    without light or shade -
    the color of my eyes is clear
    -
    day ends, day begins
    to arise or sleep
    in all lights, thine beauty's to be

  5.  
    john tiong chunghoo
    2004-01-29 05:09:12
     

    winter cold
    between each haiku line
    my cough

  6.  
    patricia Prime (pprime at ihug dot co dot nz)
    2004-01-29 21:23:28
     

    email
    a tiny poem
    circles the globe

  7.  
    ed markowski (1elmarko at comcast dot net)
    2004-01-29 22:03:24
     

    river walk...
    a cloud between
    each stepping stone

  8.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-08-08 17:18:38
     

    midnight silence --
    the haiku around the white peonies
    comes to mind

    -

  9.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-08-08 21:44:27
     

    haiku boulders
    the Indian man
    adjusts his dhoti

  10.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-08-08 22:54:38
     

    heat of the night -
    dhoti on the floor
    his pride remains

  11.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-08-09 21:34:26
     

    puppies for sale . . .
    the pride of the litter
    kept for the family

  12.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-08-09 22:07:24
     

    struggling throwback
    unwanted love ...
    mirrored lake's graceful snowy swan

    -

  13.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-08-10 21:48:47
     

    watching every step
    of the farmer's wife
    a cow in labour

  14.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-08-11 15:19:54
     

    in the green field
    the single herd --
    bellow in return

  15.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-08-12 21:00:14
     

    foreclosure notice . . .
    the farmer sells his land
    for lifestyle blocks

  16.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-08-13 03:58:03
     

    rolling grasslands
    in the midst, engineer stands --
    viewing his plans

    -

    to the sleeper
    comes a dream --
    children's screams

    -

  17.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-08-13 15:23:21
     

    end of winter
    already the maple tree
    awakes from sleep

  18.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-08-13 17:49:05
     

    sap rising
    winter's end
    sugar maple, sap runs

  19.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-08-13 19:29:10
     

    morning pancakes
    the tartness of lemons,
    sweetness of sugar

  20.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-08-14 02:51:25
     

    the sound of her voice
    calling my name ...
    the morning sun, so warm

  21.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-08-14 15:25:57
     

    recycling day
    an empty Chianti bottle
    in the trash can

  22.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-08-14 19:40:03
     

    recycling day --
    nights when lonely
    feeling we've been replaced

  23.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-08-15 21:27:31
     

    kindergarten children
    bring me a worm . . .
    then cut it in two

  24.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-08-16 03:06:30
     

    cat's litter --
    showing the children pictures
    of a much younger me

  25.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-08-16 21:37:54
     

    a swallow
    feathers the nest
    with cat fur

  26.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-08-18 04:55:25
     

    no rain, cracks in the earth
    swallow's nest
    out on a limb

  27.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-08-18 21:42:48
     

    deliberate bomb
    an avalanche set off
    on the snow fields

  28.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-08-19 01:52:54
     

    winter's whiteness -
    the arctic fox
    silently, scampers away

  29.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-08-19 20:30:17
     

    grandmother's fox fur -
    I dust and clean it
    for the garage sale

  30.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-08-20 05:50:55
     

    sneezing from the dust -
    childhood remembrancer
    ice cream truck's bell

  31.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-08-20 14:40:43
     

    ice-cream wrapper
    tumbles over a patch of grass
    and down the drain

  32.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-08-21 18:59:57
     

    peering into the drain,
    this hidden world
    extending my small hand

  33.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-08-22 21:49:28
     

    this cold morning
    fingerless gloves
    offer protection

  34.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-08-23 18:15:16
     

    open arms --
    never seeing the jagged scar
    love and affection

  35.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-08-23 21:46:00
     

    my sister's arm
    the burn scars still visible
    forty years later

  36.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-08-24 06:12:36
     

    invisible
    after many years,
    a blossom, on the orange tree

  37.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-08-24 21:43:18
     

    early spring
    I pulp oranges
    to make juice

  38.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-08-25 20:53:53
     

    cane juice rivulet
    burro's endless circling ...
    pulp rising higher

  39.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-08-25 22:02:09
     

    maple syrup
    on breakfastpancakes -
    spoiling the children

  40.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-08-29 19:35:37
     

    children -
    last days of summer
    kudzu's passionate purple blossoms

  41.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-08-29 21:33:54
     

    retirement home -
    over the fence a sprig
    of apple blossom

  42.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-08-31 16:03:39
     

    winter
    my barren thoughts --
    fence, in need of repair

    -

  43.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-08-31 21:32:40
     

    pale sunlight
    the lawn mower tractor
    goes round in circles

  44.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-09-01 19:25:45
     

    pale sunlight
    my blurry vision --
    calm before the storm


    -


    silence -
    leaves stirring
    dust rising

  45.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-09-02 21:37:05
     

    optician's letter -
    I need new glasses to study
    the fine print

  46.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-09-03 07:49:13
     

    bend in the tree
    optometrist's letter --
    L

  47.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-09-03 15:48:08
     

    alphabet letters . . .
    the child recognises
    'A'for apple

  48.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-09-03 22:57:15
     

    nearly unrecognizable
    wilted core --
    the red apple

  49.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-09-04 15:47:29
     

    first haiku
    of the morning -
    curl of apple peel

  50.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-09-04 16:15:05
     

    a haiku day --
    heavy winds and rain
    herald the approaching storm

  51.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-09-05 21:50:22
     

    waiting in line -
    a stream of traffic
    heads for the hills

  52.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-09-06 16:57:42
     

    a stream
    of traffic --

    gas rationing

  53.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-09-06 17:46:53
     

    following
    the lunch-time curry
    indigestion

  54.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-09-06 20:37:32
     

    digest
    what follows ...
    yesterday, this rooster crowed!!!

  55.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-09-06 21:06:43
     

    suburbia -
    a crowing rooster
    wakes the district

  56.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-09-07 04:46:57
     

    suburbia -
    an escape
    from the rat race

  57.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-09-07 21:23:36
     

    bedtime story . . .
    nightmares about ratakes -
    half rat, half snake

  58.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-09-08 02:29:07
     

    yellow butterfly resting
    on the yellow rose --
    bedtime story

  59.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-09-08 21:36:41
     

    graduation day -
    in her arms roses
    and baby's breath

  60.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-09-09 05:09:21
     

    restless night
    pausing in her doorway --

    baby's breath

  61.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-09-09 20:54:46
     

    shifting furniture
    he gets the bed stuck
    in the doorway

  62.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-09-10 06:33:58
     

    at night
    avoiding the furniture ...
    blackout

  63.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-09-10 16:11:26
     

    "for sale" sign -
    the next-door neighbour
    cleans the yard

  64.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-09-10 17:01:22
     

    buried
    in overgrown grass --
    "for sale" sign

  65.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-09-11 15:30:19
     

    transfixed
    but only by the wind
    I examine the sign

  66.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-09-11 15:56:51
     

    i heard you calling
    only the wind knows
    my name

  67.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-09-11 16:23:25
     

    whisper of a voice -
    my pet name a secret
    known to few

  68.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-09-12 04:28:45
     

    late night rummaging
    whisper of a voice
    "who's there"

  69.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-09-12 21:32:21
     

    night chattering -
    it's only the possums
    on the roof

  70.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-09-13 09:11:21
     

    she giggles -
    pass bedtime
    playing possum

  71.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-09-13 21:46:17
     

    favourite story -
    the same one over
    and over again

  72.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-09-14 04:28:07
     

    morning visitor --
    molting blue jay
    the same one, again

  73.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-09-14 21:37:36
     

    jay walker -
    almost sideswept by a car
    hardly notices

  74.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-09-15 03:22:21
     

    sideswipe
    walk on the wild side ...
    her alluring eyes

  75.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-09-15 21:29:41
     

    new road crossing -
    forgetting the rules
    I'm almost knocked down

  76.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-09-16 04:20:42
     

    brewing on the horizon
    another day
    new road crossing

  77.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-09-16 20:52:51
     

    school holidays
    children on the crossing
    carry heavy loads

  78.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-09-17 10:50:02
     

    ants commuting with
    heavy loads --
    i idly stand by

  79.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-09-17 15:28:17
     

    idle in spring sun
    I watch the washing machine's
    spin cycle

  80.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-09-17 21:22:37
     

    reddish autumn sun
    rustling withered corn stalks -
    harvest moon

  81.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-09-18 15:25:26
     

    steamed till supple
    but the stems still firm
    asparagus

  82.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-09-18 16:34:53
     

    sweltering evening --

    Oh! steamed asparagus
    my mind's suppleness

  83.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-09-18 18:50:18
     

    a lazy Sunday
    the house echoes to the strains
    of Mozart

  84.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-09-18 19:11:54
     

    hildegard von bingen -
    she and i
    intertwine

  85.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-09-18 20:47:29
     

    umberto eco -
    wallowing in 14th century
    politics

  86.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-09-20 16:26:22
     

    one truth above all else
    "lady prime" ...
    Il nome della rosa

  87.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-09-20 19:26:13
     

    "a rose by any other name" -
    in the spring gardens
    rosebuds tightly furled

  88.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-09-20 21:58:08
     

    last of summer
    beginning of autumn --
    last peach rosebud tightly furled

  89.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-09-21 13:33:35
     

    everywhere you look
    blossom scattered
    by high winds

  90.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-09-22 20:13:19
     

    the barren tree
    my eyes, closing --
    remember

  91.  
    Patricia Prime
    2004-09-22 21:12:29
     

    blossom festival
    the snow falls on branches
    white on pink

  92.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-09-26 05:54:15
     

    autumn's birth
    summer's tears -
    more firewood, need gathering

    -

    fronds rustling -
    feeling a chill
    within

  93.