rain drops
falling upon the yellow rose...
my gaze

—bobby michael richardson
        

About the author: bobby michael richardson
orgbob at webtv.net

"my haiku tend to be more epigrammatic and offer commentary, often ironic, on the world or universe at large. which is not to say one approach is better than the other, but merely different --"

 

Responses to the haiku for 15 April 2004 by bobby michael richardson

  1.  
    Mark Eugenio (PatuissetIsland at aol dot com)
    2004-04-15 00:41:03
     

    rain drops--
    hitting the buttercup
    by chance

  2.  
    john tiong chunghoo
    2004-04-15 04:10:29
     

    rain
    the shy woman runs to
    collect her clothes

  3.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2004-04-15 04:18:52
     

    rain shower
    spring mornings remembered --
    tears falling

  4.  
    ed markowski (1elmarko at comcast dot net)
    2004-04-15 07:48:54
     

    spring rain
    avoiding the worms
    on the hopscotch squares


    afternoon rain
    laura tells luke
    "it's over."

  5.  
    Mark Eugenio (PatuissetIsland at aol dot com)
    2004-04-15 10:13:51
     

    rain pelting
    the dusty road--
    exploding rain drops

  6.  
    Marjo in San Francisco (marjosfo at earthlink dot net)
    2004-04-15 10:31:36
     

    ninety days of rain
    can't forget
    ... years ago

  7.  
    H. Gene Murtha (Genemurt at cs dot com)
    2004-04-15 19:23:40
     

    well the replies look like a laundry list, but I like your haiku.

    Gene

  8.  
    Deborah P Kolodji
    2004-04-16 09:14:07
     

    grey drizzle --
    a yellow rose bobbing
    petals down

    Deborah P Kolodji
    Tinywords 05-20-03
    http://www.tinywords.com/haiku/2003/05/20/

  9.  
    shirley cahayom (shaman99 at msn dot com)
    2004-04-18 20:14:51
     

    nursing my coffee cup
    i look out in the rain
    its soft drizzle
    triggers the memories
    of our happy days

  10.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webv dot net)
    2004-08-24 21:12:47
     

    crumpled red rose
    falling from her hand
    his last letter

    -

  11.  
    prado chekov
    2005-08-17 15:26:13
     

    not bad, but needs an edit...

    rain falls
    on the yellow rose...
    my gaze

    much cleaner this way.


    morning crows
    we bicker over
    a burnt slice of toast

    feel free to critique my haiku bobby.
    prado

  12.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2005-08-17 18:54:50
     

    prado,
    you've turned what was to be a boring evening into a delightful one, for this, i must thank you.

    "edit" perhaps you meant, break it down, in order for you to understand.

    my words at least caused you to think.

    prado, i will read your work, are you taking offence(offense) to what i'm saying because it's different from your opinion.

    NOW, that's very sad.

    think about it.

  13.  
    prado chekov
    2005-08-17 19:14:49
     

    bobby,
    no offense taken at all. it seems as though
    you may be offended by the scent of your
    resistance to a sensible edit. first of all,
    it's a given that rain falls in "drops"
    so in the name of brevity, "drops" should
    be cleaved. secondly, "upon" reeks of 18th
    century english poetry, it's an antiquated word.
    again, in the name of brevity another syllable
    (up) can be cleaved. smile bob, we're on candid camera!

  14.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2005-08-17 22:01:18
     

    lol

    prado,
    i'd think (edit) would suffice.
    all raindrops do not fall, well eventually i'd think. i've seen raindrops flying sideway, even being swept upward, some seemingly never landing; but in the interest of discussion, as the raindrops were falling, some fell(landed) upon the rose as others landed elsewhere. then, there are the sheets of rain.
    "scent of resistance", prado, are you making this up.
    in my past comments, you'll see i love antiquated words(meanings)

  15.  
    prado chekov
    2005-08-18 12:06:40
     

    bobby,
    first. i do exist and have for the past 44
    years. i do not have a computer so i use
    the address to get my messages across. i
    discovered tiny words a month ago. as i perused
    the poems, i noticed your comments, and found them to be the only worthwhile remarks. i too
    am verbose, and i enjoy a good debate. have found
    you to be a worthy opponent. i mean this as a
    compliment.

    high noon
    goofy and his shadow
    duel at disneyworld

  16.  
    levon machenry
    2005-11-08 17:10:28
     

    bobby,
    wasn't trying to stifle you on the other
    poating. was joking around. kinda thought
    the plug might be pulled like it was on
    the ketoacidosis / ketosis debate. as for
    the direction of haiku, who knows? art
    is so subjective, whats avante and cutting
    for some is banal and boring to others.
    levon


    lookout mountain
    a wedge of blue
    widens in the cloudy sky

  17.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2005-11-08 19:20:25
     

    levon, i tried responding to your response, it was returned as being (undeliverable), for all i had to say; i'll place my ending haiku, and make mention i bear no malice

    seen cross the distance
    grandfather mountain--
    even in the dark

    my words, once again, were too many.

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