stillness
along this snowpacked road
noises of small birds

—Mike Farley
        

About the author: I live with my wife Shirlee on a cattle ranch near the little ski town of Red Lodge, Montana, and have been loving and writing haiku for several years now. I draw my inspiration from the images of the high-plains, mountains, weather, wildlife, livestock, ranch work and outdoor recreation which surround me daily.

Responses to the haiku for 15 February 2005 by Mike Farley

  1.  
    Mixx
    2005-02-15 12:51:48
     

    woods of rain and dew
    where sunlight forgets the day
    silent footsteps fall

  2.  
    Kate (chrismomxyz at yahoo dot com)
    2005-02-15 15:29:34
     

    between loads
    of laundry and dishes-
    silence

  3.  
    Nelle Stevenson
    2005-02-15 17:46:54
     

    Hi Mike enjoyed your haiku! Perhaps you've seen mine on tw. Like you I live on the land and delight in the haiku moments our way of life can provide.
    Hup...Hup!
    from the empty cattleyards,voices
    of frogs

  4.  
    john tiong chunghoo
    2005-02-17 04:46:54
     

    stillness
    a few birds
    sing away noon

  5.  
    E.H.
    2005-02-17 08:53:55
     

    Beautiful!!

    Although I don't live on a snowpacked road,
    I can share your wonder;
    I express mine this way:

    outside my window
    tiny birds chirp
    singing me awake

  6.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2005-02-18 04:55:44
     

    e.h., i enjoyed reading your haiku

    i enjoyed mike's haiku, also.
    "for me", a rearrangement of lines enhanced both

    noises of small birds
    along this snowpacked road --
    stillness

    yours:

    tiny birds chirp
    outside the window --
    singing me awake

    Joy of the Haiku, a shared moment.
    most pieces(haiku) fail the aha!!! test.
    achieved in one of two ways; that magical turn after l-2, or the pointing out of something mundane, but we were too busy to take note of

  7.  
    shirley weese
    2005-02-19 12:46:38
     

    out of the wind
    february sun
    warm silence

  8.  
    Writing Chemistry
    2005-02-21 12:00:18
     

    student's pencil,
    inching tower of
    knowledge or yawn?

  9.  
    Kamesh (kameshwar dot rao at gmail dot com)
    2005-02-23 23:11:38
     

    Bob,

    I wouldnt re-arrange the lines...

    The writer finds 'stillness along this snowpacked road', wonders if there is life at all along the snow packed road, and that is exactly when he hears the sounds of the small birds. The sounds answer the writer's query, that nature can never be still, that there is life in the most unlikely of places and at unlikely time. Its a beautiful moment.

    But Bob, by rearranging mike's haiku, are u not inverting the Haiku moment?

  10.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2005-02-24 06:40:21
     

    kamesh,
    you failed to perceive my words. in rearranging the lines, i mentioned, "for me, this enhanced the reading".
    the "wondering" of the writer is lost upon me. we as readers have only the lines which were written; and from this, the effect of them on our "imagery".
    in your explanation for the author, did you have privy to a conversation with the writer.
    (inverting the haiku moment), at times we take note of things in hindsight.

  11.  
    Kamesh (kameshwar dot rao at gmail dot com)
    2005-02-24 21:41:08
     

    Bob,
    That was my own interpretation, and I guess I was trying to impose my arguments on you. That is against the spirit of Haiku. "Haiku does not seek to impose on the mind of the reader, to construct a narrative, or advance an argument. Instead the poem takes a perception, an observation or contrast, and invites the reader to explore it, to interpret it as they will" - John E. Carley, Director, WHCpoetrybridge. I went overboard with my interpretation. Please accept my apologies.

  12.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at wetv dot net)
    2005-02-24 23:13:55
     

    Kamesh,
    no apology needed, i appreciate your responses. your words give me the opportunity to review, to delve deeper into my personal convictions.
    seeing through your eyes gave me a new perspective.

    too many simply read the haiku; proclaiming indignation when others stray.

    (i would think) more would take the opportunity, provided by tinywords, to make their thoughts known; perchance (enhancing) their power of observation

  13.  
    Mixx
    2005-03-06 12:19:41
     

    stillness
    tinywords silenced
    has someone "retired"?

  14.  
    Ed Schwellenbach
    2005-03-06 18:02:29
     

    not even
    reading glasses help--
    tinywords

  15.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2005-03-13 15:29:29
     

    morning mist
    walk through the garden --
    the silence of my path

  16.  
    peter loudon
    2005-06-08 12:28:54
     

    still & hot
    he recalls a night
    on the mekong river

  17.  
    b.m.r.
    2009-02-23 16:07:56
     

    silence--
    these welcomed moments
    even the snow's crunch

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