black on black
the tombstone's shadow
on the widow's dress

—Bret Wooldridge
        

About the author: Bret Wooldridge is a 46 year old blue collar worker in Northern California. He plays guitar when he's not scribbling verse. "If you allow them to, ordinary things want to show you they are special."

 

Responses to the haiku for 12 May 2005 by Bret Wooldridge

  1.  
    2005-05-12 09:30:36
     

    This is probably my favorite hiaku of the year so far. So perfect. Brillliant, even. I will share this with my poetry writing classes as an example of what modern haiku can do. Great work Bret Woolridge!

  2.  
    2005-05-12 09:42:04
     

    Wow, that is an evocative poem. Thanks for sharing that one. What an image..
    Troy

  3.  
    Kate (chrismomxyz at yahoo dot com)
    2005-05-12 11:17:39
     

    first anniversary...
    white roses planted
    in moonlight

  4.  
    Bill Kenney
    2005-05-12 11:25:08
     

    after the funeral . . .
    eyeglasses
    in a straw basket

  5.  
    Mixx
    2005-05-12 12:29:43
     

    granite stones
    even in the sunlight
    glimmer cold



    widow in black
    reflecting
    the lonely abyss

    today's 'ku...too cool...

    chilly, chillier
    of course, there's the chilliest
    be glad you're alive

  6.  
    Kate (chrismomxyz at yahoo dot com)
    2005-05-12 12:42:23
     

    great ku, Mixx:)

    in the dust
    a new widow drops
    her veil

  7.  
    Mixx
    2005-05-12 12:58:10
     

    well, thank-you, kate...

    white roses, in the moonlight...beautiful imagery, enjoyed that very much as well.

    Mixx

  8.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2005-05-12 20:36:29
     

    fog
    snaking through heavy laden blackberry bushes --
    basket in hand

  9.  
    john tiong chunghoo
    2005-05-12 21:45:33
     

    blackout
    candlelight
    children drive animals on the walls

  10.  
    sylvain moret
    2005-05-13 14:15:18
     

    great SENRYU.



    graveside service
    the sting
    of a december wind

  11.  
    bret wooldridge
    2005-05-13 17:40:59
     

    thanks all! its one of my few from the "darkside".
    mike a. you are obviously cultured! ;)you (the rest of you too) and your students are welcome to write with me in the haiku forum at shadowpoetry.com where i co-moderate.


    great replies everybody! a privelige to be read by my peers!
    john, your child driven animal shadows are absolutely primitive! (i mean that in the best possible sense)

    regards, bret

  12.  
    levon machenry
    2005-05-13 19:37:10
     

    bret,
    you've reduced the traditional country
    ballad "long black veil" down to it's
    essence in a marvelous way! great short poem
    levon machenry

    first light...
    the confederate cemetery
    filled with songbirds

  13.  
    ed markowski
    2005-05-13 23:07:53
     

    bret,
    haiku or senryu no quibbling about
    the quality of the piece.
    cheers,
    ed

    dust
    the future floats through a gap
    in the living room drapes

  14.  
    martin
    2005-05-14 10:39:12
     

    postal funeral
    the grave smaller than the coffin

  15.  
    Vasile Moldovan (vasilemoldovan at yahoo dot com)
    2005-05-18 04:34:36
     

    Suddenly, a splash
    about the municipal graveyard:
    snowy dove on the wing

  16.  
    Dennis
    2005-07-31 21:47:50
     

    This poem showed me more what haiku is about than all the rest of the "explanations" I've read. It was real "eureka" for me. Thanks Bret !

  17.  
    warren wells
    2005-09-10 16:33:41
     

    Memorial Day...
    the shadow of old glory
    snakes across his headstone


    in protest of bush's lie based war
    and in honor of my brothers who
    fell in johnson and nixon's
    war of lies

  18.  
    b.m.r.
    2009-03-05 04:11:46
     

    black on black
    with winter's harvest--
    further i go into the night

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