saturday morning
biking to the park
the click of marbles

—Carol Raisfeld

About the author: Carol Raisfeld lives in Atlantic Beach, NY USA. She serves as Director of WHChaikumultimedia, Associate Editor for Simply Haiku and as a moderator for WHClovehaiku. Her poetry and photography appear in print journals as well as online interactive PhotoHaiku galleries and magazines. Her work can also be seen on her personal website: Haiku Buds.

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published 13 May 2005
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Responses to the haiku for 13 May 2005 by Carol Raisfeld

  1.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2005-05-13 03:47:11
     

    before dawn
    languishing rooster crow --
    nameless day

  2.  
    john tiong chunghoo
    2005-05-13 04:17:46
     

    saturday morning
    park full of five-day week
    young

  3.  
    Bill Kenney
    2005-05-13 06:25:51
     

    making breakfast
    after making love
    Saturday morning

  4.  
    michel williams
    2005-05-13 07:04:05
     

    call of the locomotive
    echoing
    the bicyclists whistle

  5.  
    Mixx
    2005-05-13 08:26:10
     

    Another poignant 'ku from you...I can see the boys shooting marbles and hear the drop of the stone on asphalt as the girls "hopscotch"!

  6.  
    Laryalee
    2005-05-13 17:28:25
     

    Nice one, Carol!

    jogging path --
    six turtles sunning
    on a log

  7.  
    Andrea (a dot cecon at virgilio dot it)
    2005-05-14 02:44:36
     

    I agree with Mixx... a great 'ku! I can see and I can heard everything... Thank you so much!

  8.  
    martin
    2005-05-14 10:29:23
     

    river sunlight
    the smell of tugboats
    and blossoms

    martin

  9.  
    kate (chrismomxyz at yahoo dot com)
    2005-05-16 09:28:44
     

    a rattle
    of coins, he bows
    his gratitude

  10.  
    sylvain moret
    2005-05-16 17:37:50
     

    don't know how you could have heard those
    marbles click while riding a bicycle, but
    then some things must be taken on faith.

    marbles...
    the class clown rolls out
    his glass eye

  11.  
    Vasile Moldovan (vasilemoldovan at yahoo dot com)
    2005-05-18 04:11:18
     

    After a sleepless night,
    in the end a daydream:
    Saturday again

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