outdoor concert
the mosquitoes
off-key

—Laryalee Fraser

About the author: Lary is a retired reporter/photographer, enjoying small-town life in British Columbia, Canada. Her website is "a leaf rustles".

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Responses to the haiku for 6 June 2005 by Laryalee Fraser

  1.  
    Hugh Durden
    2005-06-06 14:55:46
     

    What a clever evocation of the time of day and setting by implication! Mosquitoes are only active around dawn and sunset, so this is an evening concert with its attendant failing light, rising humidity, freshening - then dying - breezes, all of which I remember without thought from two things, an outdoor concert and mosquitoes.

    Few words; much meaning.

  2.  
    paul jenkins
    2005-06-07 12:10:10
     

    aren't outdoor concerts usually held
    in the evening? not so sure of the
    cleverness of this piece.


    humid night
    the scent of deet
    hangs in the air

  3.  
    bob richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2005-06-07 13:23:09
     

    humid morn
    overpowering heat --
    as the doves express love

  4.  
    oc holiday
    2005-06-07 16:41:10
     

    what key does a mosquito "buzz" in,
    or should i ask jeeves? is this an
    example of hyperbole in haiku?


    moonlit night
    the mole
    on mick jagger's chin

  5.  
    john tiong chunghoo
    2005-06-08 03:32:54
     

    outdoor concert
    the stars
    in the sky

  6.  
    Bill Kenney
    2005-06-08 06:44:23
     

    outdoor concert
    rumble of drums
    and thunder

  7.  
    EH
    2005-06-08 08:55:52
     

    I like your haiku a lot! Been there, enjoyed the music, swatted the skeeters! Also, the response haiku mentioning drums and thunder was great too!
    Write on!!!

  8.  
    H. Gene Murtha (Genemurtha at cs dot com)
    2005-06-09 18:01:28
     

    enjoyed your haiku Lary, I will share my
    "out door concert" haiku at a later date,
    though, you may have already read this?

    All my best,

    Gene

  9.  
    martin
    2005-06-10 20:43:23
     

    lake concert
    the sound of mosquitoes
    between movements

  10.  
    levon machenry
    2005-10-03 16:21:28
     

    bluegrass festival
    the fiddle solo gives way
    to mosquitos

  11.  
    b.m.r.
    2009-03-19 17:53:43
     

    abrupt silence--
    this side of bedroom wallpaper
    this black cricket!!!

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