white sails ...
a wind has also shaped
the tree

—Alan Summers
        

Previous publications:
Mainichi Shimbun monthly haiku column, June 2005
Azami #21 February 1995 #22 March 1995 #27 August 1995
Micropress Yates, Australian micropress publication, July 1995

About the author: Alan's haiku and poetry is published in over 60 anthologies, and a number of languages. He regularly reads, performs, and workshops from venues as diverse as possible including shop windows; inner city rainforests; cliff tops; to the more orthodox places...on occasion. His website is: http://www.withwords.org.uk

Contact: alan at withwords dot org dot uk

 

Responses to the haiku for 17 May 2006 by Alan Summers

  1.  
    martin
    2006-05-17 00:34:32
     

    an old attempt:

    spring campus
    the wind shapes the sound
    through the trees

  2.  
    sylvain moret
    2006-05-17 12:08:30
     

    nice poem, but "the wind has also shaped
    a tree" sounds a bit smoother. just a
    suggestion.

  3.  
    2006-05-17 12:18:01
     

    Hi sylvain!

    Thanks for comments, but in this case I deliberately choose "a wind" to show that it isn't the same 'wind' necessarily.

    But as with all good constructive comments I will definitely put it in my comments bank, and look closely at both options for a future collection.

    white sails ...
    the wind has also shaped
    a tree

    With much appreciation,
    Alan

  4.  
    Angelika Wienert
    2006-05-17 14:42:06
     

    i love this ku since i read it the first time (Mainichi, 2005)

  5.  
    2006-05-17 18:32:23
     

    That's a fantastic way of looking at it.

  6.  
    2006-05-18 12:30:57
     

    Thanks for all the kind comments both on here, and via private emails, I really appreciate all the comments.

    This is still a surprise hit for me, but it certainly has grown on me.

  7.  
    b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2006-05-18 15:07:54
     

    unfurled sail~

    her red scarf
    captured by the wind
    her flowing black hair

  8.  
    uro
    2006-06-06 15:06:58
     

    A windswept hawthorn looking back, out to sea on a coastal path.
    Yes I see it.
    Thank you

    regards,
    jerry

  9.  
    b.m.r.
    2009-06-03 16:24:23
     

    feeling the wind in my salted bearded cheeks-
    her hands

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