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Responses to the haiku for 29 May 2006 by Anthony Slauson

1.  
   Angelika Wienert
   2006-05-29 00:19:13
    

   this repetition of violet (violet/more violet) and the contrast to silver is very interesting
   
   i don`t need any punctuation in this ku

2.  
   b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
   2006-05-29 08:41:20
    

   brilliant sunset *
   
   bougainvillaea in bloom
   though redder

3.  
   GWilson
   2006-05-29 09:37:51
    

   I inhale--
   drunk with the scent of
   late blooming lilacs

4.  
   Dirk van Nouhuys (DHvN at wandd dot com)
   2006-05-29 12:16:13
    

   The colors suck
   more being out of
   twilight.

5.  
   David Fox
   2006-05-29 14:51:50
    

   Anthony,
   I loved this haiku! I edit a print magazine, The Poet's Art. Visit my website (http://www.freewebs.com/thepoetsart/) for contact info if you are interested in submitting.
   Yours truly,
   David Fox

6.  
   Bill Kenney
   2006-05-29 16:47:29
    

   One from winter 2005:
   
   evergreens
   more green today—
   sun after snow

7.  
   sylvain moret
   2006-05-29 19:04:47
    

   anthony,
   good poem. i wonder though if the first line
   should be the third. works either way though.
   
   there's a town in northern kentucky named
   rabbit hatch. it's about 40 miles northeast
   of louisville. drank a bunch of beer on the
   steps of the general store, which composes
   the entirety of the town.
   
   our identical twins
   in reversible jackets...
   spring snow
   
   sylvain

8.  
   Collin Barber
   2006-05-29 23:04:13
    

   Hey Bill,
   
   I really like your haiku, what about this?...
   
   
   evergreens
   more green today-
   sunlit snow
   
   
   Just a thought, although it may be better left as is...I like it either way.
   
   
   Collin

9.  
   jens oluf
   2006-05-30 00:19:24
    

   Dearest Anthony,
   thanks for making me smile.
   I like them lines.
   
   I think you like violet.
   Whats the color just before (or after) violet called?
   
   the blue in the clouds -
   the color just before black.
   tells all about me

10.  
    Darleen Inman
    2006-05-30 08:26:52
     

    Hello Anthony,I enjoyed your poem.Not the usual 5/7/5 I was taught, but I liked the content.Nice job, Darleen

11.  
    Anthony Slauson
    2006-05-30 17:38:39
     

    Thanks for the positive responses to this haiku..the double dash was a mistake(possibly to much caffeine)It was supposed to be a single. Looking at it again, I have to agree with Angelika, that it would work without any punctuation at all. Again thanks for the responses and constructive critisism

12.  
    d. f. tweney
    2006-05-31 08:51:51
     

    Anthony and all -- a double dash is a traditional substitute for an em dash, which is what properly belongs at the end of that line. I've changed the typography so it's correct now. I agree it would work with no punctuation, but I prefer it this way!

13.  
    b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2006-07-02 07:36:39
     

    dft
    some may yet misunderstand the (&mdash)
    (em) being a variable measure of print type;
    type being letter size(ex. pica)
    
    &mdash, some understand to be the doubling in length/width of the dash(-)
    some say the dash being the width of the letter (m), capitalized.
    
    conceivably future keyboards will carry this symbol
    
    ---
    
    star on the horizon&mdash
    finding my way home
    in the dark

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