so pristine white
the field of snow -- I lower
the shotgun

—C W Hawes
        

About the author: C W Hawes (c_w_hawes@yahoo.com) is a bureaucrat by day and a poet by night. His published work has appeared in a variety of print and electronic publications. He lives in the midwestern United States with his wife and daughter.

Responses to the haiku for 17 January 2007 by C W Hawes

  1.  
    Magyar
    2007-01-17 06:42:38
     

    CW...
    _Out of your good haiku, a new word simmers
    -simplexity-. Simple needs can be met... without the complexity of harm.
    _The Patuxet said: The greatest hunter, kills the least
    _M

  2.  
    Bill Kenney
    2007-01-17 07:51:57
     

    Watch that recoil, Chris. This has a kick to it.

  3.  
    norton reed
    2007-01-17 08:46:05
     

    excellent piece. understated and creative.
    nr

  4.  
    Andrea (andrea dot cecon at gmail dot com)
    2007-01-17 08:58:03
     

    poignant ku...

  5.  
    2007-01-17 09:44:54
     

    Congratulations on this Chris. Nice construction in line 2, as well.

  6.  
    Emelie Buckner
    2007-01-17 10:17:59
     

    Under English rules the haiku should read 5,7,5 syllables in 3 lines. I find that most Haiku from Tiny Words break this rule. Am I wrong or is this theAmerican way?

  7.  
    2007-01-17 12:28:32
     

    Emilie, click on the "about" link at the top of this page, or click here to learn more about haiku.

  8.  
    Mary Griffith
    2007-01-17 17:04:48
     

    I caught my breath on this one - the image of my father hunting pheasant over stubbled Iowa cornfields...thanks.

  9.  
    Judith Ingram
    2007-01-17 21:35:23
     

    Magyar . . . Thank you for sharing your thoughts. The greatest hunter kills the least.

    Judith

  10.  
    Mike G
    2007-01-18 12:29:05
     

    CW,

    Ode to my large hands
    Brown spots and also brown stripes
    Very bare indeed

  11.  
    laryalee
    2007-01-18 20:21:57
     

    Hi Chris,
    this is memorable...
    well penned, indeed!
    :-)
    Lary

  12.  
    b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2007-01-19 19:40:46
     

    magyar, the patuxet, out of kindness a tragedy.
    -

    emelie, within your own words tinywords is characterized, "daily, it continues to be groundbreaking".
    -
    even the masters strayed from this 5-7-5 (ruse).
    this rule is neither english nor american, albeit it has caught on.
    -


    field
    of pristine whiteness--
    distant caws in flight

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