the boy's thumb
in his mouth--
the carpenters grin

—Tim Jamieson
        

About the author: I am Canadian, born and raised in the province of Saskatchewan and living in Winnipeg, Manitoba. I first began writing haiku in 1983, and have had work accepted in Canada, the U.S., Japan, Australia, New Zealand, England, Ireland and Belgium.

Responses to the haiku for 7 February 2007 by Tim Jamieson

  1.  
    Bill Kenney
    2007-02-07 05:27:36
     

    For me, this reveals itself slowly and all the more effectively for that. So much here about boys and men.

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    Magyar
    2007-02-07 07:47:11
     

    _So true Bill, and the -smile- broadcasts the memory.
    _Tim, I'm smiling!
    _M

  3.  
    Alan Summers
    2007-02-07 09:23:24
     

    I like this partly because we don't have enough sensation haiku, they are predominently visual, and that a carpenter is mentioned! ;-)

    Dee Evetts being the famous carpenter haiku writer so far of course, but that might change! ;-)

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    b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2007-02-08 20:38:30
     

    alan, a question, isn't the haiku visual in nature.

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    bill, your words hammer truth; boys imitate men, while the boy lives on in the man.

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    nail and crusted hammer
    midst the saw dust
    on the floor...
    teary-eyed boy

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    magyar, smiles grace the faces of those not having held the hammer, if only for a moment.

    then, a cringe

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    silence-
    the throbbing black & blue thumb

  5.  
    Rita Odeh
    2007-02-09 02:59:13
     

    The boy's thumb,the implied hammer, the grown-up's grin - represent a sensual haiku.Well written. Enjoyed.

  6.  
    Corneliu Traian Atanasiu (forevernelcor at gmail dot com)
    2007-02-11 00:12:27
     

    Well, well, the thumb is crushed, I understand. The boy isn't weaned from his ache.

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