winter solitude--
only a sparrow
to share my meal

—Rita Odeh
        

About the author: Rita Odeh is a Palestinian poet living in Nazareth, Israel. She studied English and general literature in Haifa university. She has five books of poetry. Her interest in haiku began on Oct. 2006.

Responses to the haiku for 16 February 2007 by Rita Odeh

  1.  
    Angelika Wienert
    2007-02-16 07:51:38
     

    i like your haiku very much!

  2.  
    Bill Kenney
    2007-02-16 08:09:04
     

    Well done, Rita.

  3.  
    Jeffrey Woodward (j_l_woodward at yahoo dot com)
    2007-02-16 08:11:07
     

    Simplicity says it best. A fine haiku with an emotive resonance beyond its surface imagery. Good work, Rita.

  4.  
    Tracy Koretsky
    2007-02-16 08:19:40
     

    So much is conveyed by the word "only". Just try removing it and you'll see what I mean! I'm so glad you included it -- a wise choice.

  5.  
    2007-02-16 08:23:32
     

    I thought this was wonderful, Rita. It's just amazing how much comes to the senses through the sparseness of quantity when it comes to haiku. Beautiful!

  6.  
    2007-02-16 08:26:26
     

    Hi Rita, a simple, yet moving haiku of nature and human-nature . . . love ya, an'ya

  7.  
    Adrian
    2007-02-16 08:32:29
     

    I wish I had a sparrow friend--I'm always eating alone.

  8.  
    Alan Summers
    2007-02-16 08:53:14
     

    Simple, beautiful, nice allusion to Issa!

  9.  
    kala ramesh
    2007-02-16 09:24:11
     

    simply elegant!
    -kala

  10.  
    Vasile Moldovan (vasilemoldovan at yahoo dot com)
    2007-02-16 10:18:15
     

    Mrs Rita, your poem is a wonderful haiku about the universal peace.A common subject for three great religions.At least...

    making peace with...
    a woman and a sparrow
    share the fast meal

  11.  
    Collin Barber
    2007-02-16 10:49:12
     

    Excellent, Rita!

    Collin

  12.  
    John (aka: 'chaffinch')
    2007-02-16 13:12:12
     

    midnight

    my house spiders
    [from safe corners]
    occasionally ..lunge :)

    Your haiku is Rita.

  13.  
    Norman Darlington
    2007-02-16 13:15:20
     

    Hello, Rita!
    Astahsin haikuki jiddan. It paints a very spare but effective image. Thank you (and thanks, Dylan) for posting it here.
    Salaam, shalom, peace.

  14.  
    Susan Constable
    2007-02-16 15:28:24
     

    Well done, Rita. So glad to see this one find such a nice home.

  15.  
    b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2007-02-16 15:35:09
     

    morning solitude...
    alone
    this mockingbird

    and me

  16.  
    2007-02-16 17:02:00
     

    A delicate touch to winter solitude.
    I enjoyed it...well done, Rita.

  17.  
    michele
    2007-02-17 17:01:13
     

    suiting the mood of the season, drawn with an adept hand. very nice.
    kind regards, michele

  18.  
    BiloxiLinda
    2007-02-17 17:50:46
     

    today is my first experience with Haiku. I am glad it was with you.

  19.  
    Terra Martin
    2007-02-17 23:07:33
     

    Very sensitive and moving I enjoyed it very much. Thanks Rita.

  20.  
    electraglide
    2007-02-18 02:19:23
     

    ~ عاصف
    طيور
    متعثره

    windy
    birds
    stumble

  21.  
    JSchone
    2007-02-18 17:44:30
     

    Marvelous, simple yet emotive imagery. Thank you for the poem!

  22.  
    myron lysenko (myronpoet at hotmail dot com)
    2007-02-18 20:03:03
     

    i remember seeing this one being workshopped. lovely to see it appear in my Inbox. Well done Rita!

  23.  
    H. Gene Murtha
    2007-02-19 03:50:22
     

    I still do not feel that "only" works
    within this example.

    Now you have to think about what "only"
    means, and there is more going on here,
    than; only.

    gene

  24.  
    Georgia
    2007-02-19 14:41:40
     

    Fascinating haiku, & I notice that the "only" adds depths of meaning rather than detracting.

  25.  
    b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2007-02-19 15:29:45
     

    (only)
    neither more nor less; simply; excepting; in the end; certainly; then back to solitarily.
    gene, "only" provides a wealth of richness to rita's haiku, one to read daily with coffee.

    the cause of this (solitude), as your words suggest, gene, who knows; conceivably winter. unknowingly, the sparrow is fated to share more than a meal.

    -

    wintry morn
    only
    a sparrow sings

  26.  
    electraglide
    2007-02-20 16:58:32
     

    indeed.

  27.  
    John P. Portelli
    2007-02-21 19:26:53
     

    The simplicity is so stricking and powerful.
    "A sparrow" is such a rich symbol.
    For me the use of "only" tells me a lot about the possible subtext/s of this poem.
    Every time I read it I see something else. A sign of a good haiku!

  28.  
    laryalee
    2007-02-27 20:17:53
     

    Enjoyed this very much, Rita...
    (senility strikes -- I thought I'd replied
    here before!)
    :-)
    Lary

  29.  
    Hisnul
    2007-02-28 00:43:15
     

    Hi Rita.

    As I thought Ur lines are missing beats of ur heart.it says to tread into that up to the bottom.but bottemless feelings

  30.  
    Maha Zaatra
    2007-03-03 01:44:46
     

    One can feel profoundly the exclusivity of your use of the language. I think that excellent poets exhibit uniqueness and engage the reader with the words spontaniously...In other words;You are an excellent poetess and I am very proud of you.Maha.

  31.  
    Rita Odeh
    2007-03-07 22:27:09
     

    Dear all,
    thank you for taking the time to comment.
    I owe my humble delight to this wonderful site.

    Best, Rita.

  32.  
    brett brady (bcb at flex dot com)
    2007-03-12 14:50:22
     

    rita -
    i really like what the picture presents... maybe the "only" suggests a little more self-pity than you might want?

    a sparrow
    to share my meal -
    winter solitude

    maybe even forget the "solitude"...

    anyway, very nice... thank you -

    -brett

  33.  
    Karma Tenzing Wangchuk
    2007-04-30 20:55:17
     

    dear rita

    just discovered you and your fine poems by following links on riverbend's blog. happy to find you.

    here's an old haiku of mine from a long walk i once took in new mexico--

    a little sparrow
    takes a puddle bath . . .
    wish i could join him

    peace, tenzing

    dhdutton@yahoo.com

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