storm moon
in the rubble
Grandmother's Bible

—Patricia A. Boutilier

written the day after tornadic storms in central Florida--on the night of the full storm moon

About the author: I am a nurse, massage therapist, and Reiki Master. But my favorite definition of myself is "gramma". I write to explore the sacred in the ordinary of everyday life.

Contact: ridinghhood at writing dot com

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Responses to the haiku for 5 March 2007 by Patricia A. Boutilier

  1.  
    Patricia (a/k/a Roswila) (maryschild44 at yahoo dot com)
    2007-03-05 10:47:41
     

    Heart wrenching and warming at the same time. Personal and yet so sweeping in reach. Thank you.

  2.  
    Helga Härle
    2007-03-05 15:25:40
     

    When reading this poem for the first time, I felt something like: well, ok, interesting contrast in the last line, but so what - and why with that scenery?
    Reading it again some hours later the last line did evoke a strong feeling of trust - in connection with the foregoing scenery - and I really liked the poem. Thank you, Patricia!

  3.  
    b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2007-03-05 16:22:10
     

    pristine sky--
    neighbor's roof strewn
    cross a green lawn

    -

    patricia, i can relate, specially after wilma, katrina, jeanne, and andrew

  4.  
    Melchor F. Cichon
    2007-03-05 17:00:47
     

    Strong typhoons frequently visit the Philippines. In many occassions, many towns are flooded including some cities.

    Town Swells

    after a mountain rain--
    the whole town proper swells
    like the river

    Melchor F. Cichon
    Aklan, Philippines

  5.  
    Michael Paone (mpaone12 at comcast dot net)
    2007-03-05 17:28:18
     

    Wow. Nice one. Sorry to hear you had to experience this. I find it encouraging that you found strength and beauty in the tragedy though.

  6.  
    Ellen G. Olinger
    2007-03-06 06:48:18
     

    old papers
    forgotten card from Mom
    present tense

    touching the wood
    as I walk by
    Grandmother's table

    unable to hold your hand holding my Bible close

  7.  
    Rita Odeh
    2007-03-07 22:21:47
     

    Beautiful haiku,Patricia. I wonder if cancelling the word(grandmother)can add a deeper layer to the poem:

    storm moon
    in the rubble
    a Bible

    Thank you for sharing.
    Best, Rita.

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