thunderstorm
a young couple argue
under an umbrella


—Kara Burns
        

About the author: Kara Burns: kb at karaburns dot com

 

Responses to the haiku for 28 March 2007 by Kara Burns

  1.  
    Gosia Zamorska
    2007-03-28 05:54:58
     

    It looks like there is a thunderstorm above and and under the umbrella:)

  2.  
    Angelika Wienert
    2007-03-28 06:09:52
     

    "a young couple"

    oh, there will be more `thunderstorms` in the future...

    i like your haiku, Kara!

  3.  
    Helen Buckingham
    2007-03-28 06:33:19
     

    thunder outside
    inside
    missing you

    [first published: "Poetry Monthly"]

    - the prequel/sequel?

  4.  
    Andrea (andrea dot cecon at gmail dot com)
    2007-03-28 07:57:31
     

    so simple and to the point... it reminds me an old ku of mine:

    thunderstorm--
    a spider's hidding
    from my eyes

  5.  
    il.balan
    2007-03-28 14:36:18
     

    Human nature as piece of nature.
    Well done.

  6.  
    Alan Summers
    2007-03-29 03:27:24
     

    Very enjoyable haiku, I can picture and hear it all now! ;-)

  7.  
    Judith Ingram
    2007-03-29 11:18:03
     

    Hopefully by the time the storm is over, their argument will be, also.

    To paraphrase your ku somewhat . . .

    Thunderstorm
    under an umbrella
    a young couple kiss.

  8.  
    Willow
    2007-03-29 22:22:38
     

    Nice one Kara, I think the poetic irony in your image is quite poignant, and unstated yet suggestive, which is the mark of good poetry; expecially with haiku, subtlety in always the key. Basho would have nodded sagely at your haiku.

  9.  
    b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2007-03-30 10:49:12
     

    twi_ig_t r_inb_w
    her smile dampens
    his weather-beaten brow

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