silent casino
the ashtray full
of green olives

—dustin neal
        

About the author: he's a student of haiku; reading, writing, teaching and sharing haiku is a part of his daily life. he has been published in various established journals across the world and the net. dustin is also the editor of clouds peak.

contact: haikudustin at gmail dot com

 

Responses to the haiku for 23 May 2007 by dustin neal

  1.  
    Andrea (andrea dot cecon at gmail dot com)
    2007-05-23 03:25:24
     

    Very nice ku!

  2.  
    Tanya Hourglass
    2007-05-23 04:42:43
     

    Essence of stale, empty hours spent...so well done!

  3.  
    Sari
    2007-05-23 08:39:20
     

    Great mood. Captures the feel of a casino during off-peak hours.

  4.  
    Bill Kenney
    2007-05-23 09:01:24
     

    Y'know, Dustin, I might have just said "olives," but I would have been wrong. "green" is the magic word in this excellent ku.

  5.  
    Lolita Knabokkov
    2007-05-23 09:44:12
     

    too many
    dirty martinis
    wasted

  6.  
    Alan Summers
    2007-05-23 11:54:51
     

    I love those green olives!

  7.  
    josh wikoff
    2007-05-23 21:05:44
     

    a very, uh, fresh haiku
    it really nails the time and place sublimely

  8.  
    laryalee
    2007-05-24 21:48:34
     

    Hi Dustin,
    I laughed at this...
    that's where my green olives
    would go too!

  9.  
    b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2007-05-25 02:47:16
     

    darken casino--
    bells ring
    on his trek home

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