darkening clouds--
on the roller coaster rail
a dove


—Robbie Gamble
        

About the author: Robbie Gamble: marrob2 at comcast dot net

 

Responses to the haiku for 5 June 2007 by Robbie Gamble

  1.  
    Patricia (a/k/a Roswila (maryschild44 at yahoo dot com)
    2007-06-05 20:24:51
     

    Wow. Wonderful. I just kept reading it and feeling it...thanks.

  2.  
    Gosia Zamorska
    2007-06-06 00:32:35
     

    I like it.

  3.  
    Dana-Maria Onica
    2007-06-06 00:37:55
     

    I like very much your technique of narrowing focus for showing the dove as a basic element of your poem.
    Thank you for sharing it.

  4.  
    Anna Goluba
    2007-06-06 03:37:37
     

    Simple, beautiful and mysterious picture, I can see this dove immediately. Thank You.

  5.  
    Elena
    2007-06-06 08:20:07
     

    I like the tension in it.

  6.  
    b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2007-06-07 20:04:49
     

    darkening cloud...
    from the chimney sweep
    black bats take flight

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