bright breeze
a sighted person fingers
the statue's eyes

—Alan Summers
        

City: Bristol Today in Poems and Pictures ISBN: 0954811704 2004

About the author: Alan's haiku and poetry is published in over 60 anthologies, and a number of languages. He regularly reads, performs, and workshops from venues as diverse as possible including shop windows; inner city rainforests; cliff tops; to the more orthodox places...on occasion. His website is: http://www.withwords.org.uk

Contact: alan at withwords dot org dot uk

 

Responses to the haiku for 3 August 2007 by Alan Summers

  1.  
    Karen Hoy
    2007-08-03 07:13:28
     

    It's like I'm there, watching! I find this poem very evocative.

  2.  
    vinit
    2007-08-03 09:15:06
     

    remarkable! absolutely remarkable. i love the concept of the haiku. keep up the good work

  3.  
    Nanci
    2007-08-03 10:16:17
     

    I like the way the haiku points to the different ways that we "see" things. Sometimes what we visualize through the other senses connects in ways that sight does not. Good job with this haiku!

  4.  
    Josh Wikoff
    2007-08-03 11:32:58
     

    sibilance-
    the soothing sounds
    of a bright breeze

    nicely done Alan!

  5.  
    Norman Darlington
    2007-08-03 12:52:57
     

    bright breeze
    a sighted person fingers
    the statue's eyes

    Absolutely wonderful, Alan. Just when I'm thinking, it's all been said (which of course it both has and hasn't), along comes this poem. Thank you.

  6.  
    Bill Kenney
    2007-08-03 16:42:40
     

    Wonderfully tactile, Alan.

  7.  
    Alan Summers
    2007-08-04 04:57:14
     

    Thank you Karen, vinit, Nanci, Josh, Norman, and Bill for your kind and insightful comments.

  8.  
    b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2007-08-05 08:04:57
     

    cool light airy night--
    twinkling of her fingers
    stead of open eyes

  9.  
    Alan Summers
    2007-08-05 11:25:13
     

    I like the twinkling of her fingers!

  10.  
    Megan (markenberg at yahoo dot com)
    2007-08-05 13:56:40
     

    Excellent work, Allen! Amazing image. I wonder how it would change if it was a blind person's hand on the statue?

    bright breeze
    a blind man fingers
    the statue's eyes

    ~Megan

    first kiss
    in the topiary garden
    feeling watched

  11.  
    b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2007-08-05 16:00:43
     

    megan, that thought crossed my mind, too.
    perchance the wording would change to:
    light breeze
    rising--
    the blind man's fingers
    find the statues eyes

  12.  
    laryalee
    2007-08-05 17:51:51
     

    I really like the connection of the senses here,
    Alan...and the sense of connecting.
    ;)
    Lary

  13.  
    Collin Barber
    2007-08-05 22:21:03
     

    Awesome, Alan.

    For me, I like it better as a sighted person, as opposed to a blind one, but I do think it works either way.

    This is easy to see! Thank you.

    Collin

  14.  
    2007-08-06 03:40:21
     

    Hi Megan, hi b.m.!

    Interesting question, it was because it was a sighted person acting like you would expect someone who was blind would act that fascinated me.

    Hi laryalee,

    interestingly put, and spot on.

    Thanks Collin, you're right, and it was powerful to me because it was a sighted person being so tactile.

  15.  
    b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2007-08-06 19:37:07
     

    too often a sighted individual senses become dull; comparable to a person who speaks one language only, or one who eats the same meal daily...
    share a moment with someone visually impaired, and experience something amazing; first, get pass the sympathy.

    live a little, experience some things with your eyes closed!

    -

    moist
    and velvety soft--
    this tear forms in her sleep

  16.  
    Alan Summers
    2007-08-07 11:14:03
     

    Thanks b.m. and incredibly beautiful haiku from you. I hope you submit it to Tinywords!

  17.  
    Lesley Dewar
    2007-08-07 11:48:44
     

    Winter sunshine
    Bright skies belie wind chill
    Fingers tingle

    The cold of the statue would contrast greatly with the cold of the day.

  18.  
    Alan Summers
    2007-08-07 12:00:03
     

    Thanks Lesley!

    I really like that comment you made too:
    "The cold of the statue would contrast greatly with the cold of the day."

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