august wind
a sparrow re-rights itself
at the peanut cage

—Alan Summers
        

Published:

Snapshots haiku magazine 10, October 2001
ISSN 1461-0833

About the author: Alan's haiku and poetry is published in over 60 anthologies, and a number of languages. He regularly reads, performs, and workshops from venues as diverse as possible including shop windows; inner city rainforests; cliff tops; to the more orthodox places...on occasion. His website is: http://www.withwords.org.uk

Contact: alan at withwords dot org dot uk

 

Responses to the haiku for 15 August 2007 by Alan Summers

  1.  
    Bill Kenney
    2007-08-15 07:42:25
     

    This catches the essence of sparrowness.

  2.  
    Vasile Moldovan
    2007-08-15 09:21:22
     

    This haiku remind me of some Issa's haiku about sparrows.Although it refers about a bird, is a very human haiku. For this reason I written the follow reply:

    In the old cage
    it is not more place for
    the sparrow's wings

  3.  
    Patricia (a/k/a Roswila) (maryschild44 at yahoo dot com)
    2007-08-15 13:01:55
     

    Wonderful, Alan! I have such a fondness for the little city sparrows that visit my tiny front yard in all sorts of weather....

  4.  
    laryalee
    2007-08-15 15:48:42
     

    Hi Alan, I love the waver of the moment here!
    And while I'm not quite sure what a peanut
    cage is, I'm guessing it's a type of bird feeder?
    It's so interesting to get these global glimpses...
    I feed our birds sunflower seeds, but have never
    put out peanuts.
    ;)
    Lary

  5.  
    martin
    2007-08-15 19:31:19
     

    winter branch

    the roundness of the sparrow

    in the wind

  6.  
    2007-08-16 03:17:52
     

    Thank you Bill, Vasile, larylee, and martin for the comments, and for the complementary haiku!

    Yes, a peanut cage is indeed a bird feeder, and simply means it was a dedicated peanut feeder, as was the sparrow! ;-)

  7.  
    b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2007-08-16 20:50:01
     

    alan, first thought, my usage of (irregardless); some think it totally inappropriate. yet, it has a place and usage for effectively making a point.
    (re-rights) enhances the visual of the sparrow's ongoing actions.
    there are times i'll pronounce the "t" at the end of escargo(t); some think me boorish...

    -

    this dawn's
    irregularity--
    having cereal

  8.  
    2007-08-17 05:40:36
     

    Thanks b.m.!

    I find your haiku quite interesting, I would never have though "irregularity" would go with haiku, but you have done it! Very haiku humour, I hope you submit it to Tinywords! ;-)

  9.  
    2007-09-10 08:13:49
     

    Very Good Haiku ! Thank you Alan Summers! Thank you Vasile and Bob too!

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