street fair
smell of patchouli
on the price tag

—Megan Arkenberg

About the author: I am a student in Milwaukee, Wisconsin, where I've been writing haiku and tanka for a little over a year. My work has appeared in Simply Haiku and Modern English Tanka's "Landfall" anthology.

contact: markenberg at yahoo dot com

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Responses to the haiku for 7 September 2007 by Megan Arkenberg

  1.  
    Elphine Leduvet
    2007-09-07 01:39:33
     

    oil aroma
    on my fingertips
    until tomorrow

  2.  
    electralgide
    2007-09-07 16:31:06
     


    Ibiza*
    my fingerprints
    appear to disappear

    *I·bi·za also I·vi·za (-bs, -vthä)
    Spanish island of the Balearic Islands in the western Mediterranean Sea southwest of Majorca. The island attracts tourists and artists and has Roman, Phoenician, Carthaginian ruins.     - FreeDictionary

    ♪ http://www.vewgle.com/showthread.php?t=6325 !?

  3.  
    Robbie Gamble
    2007-09-07 17:34:27
     

    This is really nice, vivid in a small way. I'm partial to multisensory haiku, especially when one of the senses is smell.

  4.  
    b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2007-09-07 19:26:44
     

    harvested field, hippies, free love; and patchouli on her ear lobe

  5.  
    Andre Salvatierra
    2007-09-08 02:29:02
     

    Very nice haiku, it really sends the atmosphere and that moment of the street fair clearly to me.

    Just wondering if "scent" was considered alongside "smell"? Just a minor curiosity.

  6.  
    Jennifer
    2007-09-08 08:43:26
     

    Nice! I like the mix of hippies (patchouli) and commerce (price tag)--that's a street fair, all right.

  7.  
    Pearl
    2007-09-08 11:29:05
     

    Striking immediacy. As Jennifer said, it's got that secondary meaning richness.

  8.  
    electraglide
    2007-09-08 18:10:26
     

    Ibiza
    my fingerprints
    appear to disappear

  9.  
    Magyar
    2007-09-10 05:51:10
     

    Megan, A very well posed sense of yesterday... in the -present-.

    a smell
    of yesterday lingers
    new moment
    _M

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