broken clock
a bark beetle ticks 
in the wooden case 

—Artur Lewandowski

This haiku is my debut abroad.

About the author: I'm in middle-aged. I live in central Poland. I have written haiku for 2 years. I'm keen on films, literature, music (60s and 70s), old motorcycles and good food. Contact with me on azetel at gmail dot com.

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Responses to the haiku for 13 September 2007 by Artur Lewandowski

  1.  
    Patricia (a/k/a Roswila) (maryschild44 at yahoo dot com)
    2007-09-13 10:47:06
     

    Nicely evocative moment. Set me to thinking about and feeling the passage of time. Thanks!

  2.  
    Gosia Zamorska
    2007-09-13 13:59:14
     

    Bravo!!!! I like it very much :)

  3.  
    electraglide
    2007-09-13 15:07:58
     

    old man on a bench
    his beating heart marks moments
    wind blows through the trees


    (a tightly sprung little poem artur)

  4.  
    bid (bid3 at hotmail dot com)
    2007-09-13 22:43:49
     

    simple, yet beautifully profound...

  5.  
    Elphine Leduvet
    2007-09-14 01:27:51
     

    a clock that ticks
    a time that always changes
    but never dies

  6.  
    Alan Summers
    2007-09-14 03:31:48
     

    It's always good to have a haiku that uses sound as well as something visual.

    I look forward to seeing more of your work, thank you being part of the bark beetle's ticking.

  7.  
    Magyar
    2007-09-14 05:55:26
     

    Artur,
    _You relate an insect to a human product; IT, is the time keeper. But insects pay no attention to our time's ticks and tocks, and perhaps we all can learn something here. _Nicly done Artur. (oh,I own an old Puch.)
    _M

  8.  
    Helga Härle
    2007-09-14 08:50:45
     

    terrific!
    the intersection of mechanic clocktime and existence, a living being
    (and what an inspiration, since a few days I happen to be preparing a collage with broken clocks)

  9.  
    Bill Kenney (wpkenney at sprynet dot com)
    2007-09-17 09:51:42
     

    Glad you've come abroad, Artur. (I've just been celebrating the birth of my half-Polish grandaughter; my first grandchild, and I'm soon to be 75.)

    A ku that lingers beyond the first impression.

  10.  
    Andrea (andrea dot cecon at gmail dot com)
    2007-09-17 11:37:49
     

    Great debut! I look forward to seeing more of your work...

  11.  
    b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2007-09-21 08:42:40
     

    nymphs dancing
    in the autumn twilight
    orange butterflies

  12.  
    Dirk van Nouhuys
    2007-09-21 11:15:08
     

    Great. Poignant and energetic. This one really clicks.

  13.  
    Artur Lewandowski
    2007-10-14 02:39:57
     

    Thank you very much for yours opinions and nice words. To next read....

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