a bark beetle ticks
in the wooden case
This haiku is my debut abroad.
About the author: I'm in middle-aged. I live in central Poland. I have written haiku for 2 years. I'm keen on films, literature, music (60s and 70s), old motorcycles and good food. Contact with me on azetel at gmail dot com.
Nicely evocative moment. Set me to thinking about and feeling the passage of time. Thanks!
Bravo!!!! I like it very much :)
old man on a bench
his beating heart marks moments
wind blows through the trees
(a tightly sprung little poem artur)
simple, yet beautifully profound...
a clock that ticks
a time that always changes
but never dies
It's always good to have a haiku that uses sound as well as something visual.
I look forward to seeing more of your work, thank you being part of the bark beetle's ticking.
_You relate an insect to a human product; IT, is the time keeper. But insects pay no attention to our time's ticks and tocks, and perhaps we all can learn something here. _Nicly done Artur. (oh,I own an old Puch.)
the intersection of mechanic clocktime and existence, a living being
(and what an inspiration, since a few days I happen to be preparing a collage with broken clocks)
Glad you've come abroad, Artur. (I've just been celebrating the birth of my half-Polish grandaughter; my first grandchild, and I'm soon to be 75.)
A ku that lingers beyond the first impression.
Great debut! I look forward to seeing more of your work...
in the autumn twilight
Great. Poignant and energetic. This one really clicks.
Thank you very much for yours opinions and nice words. To next read....
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