tinywords: haiku for 4 February 2008 by Jordi Climent

recent puddle - 
the white of clouds 
in the way

—Jordi Climent

This is the original version in spanish:

charco reciente -
el blanco de las nubes
en el camino

About the author: Jordi Climent, jclimentb at gmail dot com

published 4 February 2008
in haiku

Responses to the haiku for 4 February 2008 by Jordi Climent

Alan Summers

2008-02-04 08:32:25

I'm a fan of puddle haiku, and felt this was a good fresh poem on the theme.
josh wikoff

2008-02-04 13:21:23

nubes abren—
la luna nos acompana
charco a charco

Creo que en el espanol, 'camino' nos ofrece mas posibilidades que 'way' en ingles. Buen trabajo, Jordi.

Saludos desde California.
Dana-Maria Onica

2008-02-04 20:39:43

Dear Jordi, I admire your poem. Thank you for sharing it. The words "recent" and "white" tell me that the rain (or storm) is over, what a relief, we can walk now, we can explore, and the clouds' reflection in the puddel brings me many feelings and suggestions at once: an upside down reality? I will step on the clouds? a fluffy puddel? :)
Reason A.

2008-02-06 19:09:59

a "ku" so nice, but in S. Indiana

puddles puddles
everywhere I look
even the dog sinks
b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)

2008-02-11 14:45:31

resounding winter rains
throughout the forest--
resounding summer croaks

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a recent trip to my home in georgia; feeling the bitter freezing rains of winter, i was surprised by the sounds of summer echoing from the nearby woods...