midday moon against the fence yellow grass


—John Stone
        

Possibly the greatest challenge: the one-liner.

About the author: I am a working musician living in Northern California. Can somebody spot me a twenty until next week? Some of my work can be found in Simply Haiku, Contemporary Haibun, and Turquoise Dawn.

Contact: Stonetalker at musician dot org

Responses to the haiku for 28 February 2008 by John Stone

  1.  
    Bill Kenney
    2008-02-28 06:43:47
     

    I disagree with your premise. The greatest challenge is excellence, as difficult to achieve in three lines as in one. But it's a challenge you've met. Good work.

  2.  
    John Stone (Stonetalker at musician dot org)
    2008-02-28 07:33:40
     

    Thank you very much, Bill...

  3.  
    Penelope
    2008-02-28 08:22:56
     

    fading sunlight mirrors blues bar

  4.  
    josh wikoff
    2008-02-28 08:27:50
     

    Johnny,

    Here's a case where a haiku with three images works well for me. Three strong images, to be sure, but they compliment rather than overpower each other.

    I think I'd prefer this poem in 3 lines for the pivot:

    midday moon
    against the fence
    yellow grass

    Nice one, amigo!

  5.  
    Scooter Lady
    2008-02-28 09:16:04
     

    moon against fence a dimpled ass

  6.  
    Pen Again
    2008-02-28 09:19:47
     

    open window speeding moon shot

  7.  
    Jen
    2008-02-28 12:23:18
     

    The more I read this one, the more I like it. Good haiku!

  8.  
    judith ingram (super dot ingram at verizon dot net)
    2008-02-28 22:17:23
     

    I, too, think this lovely haiku would be well served in three lines. Perhaps, that is being arbitrary. Much of life is.

    Full moon,
    a golden trellis up
    from the sea.

  9.  
    H. Gene Murtha
    2008-02-29 04:28:30
     

    well done as either a three line or a one-
    line haiku John.

  10.  
    Alan Summers
    2008-02-29 10:51:57
     

    I'm enjoying the layers in this one! ;-)

  11.  
    b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2008-03-07 20:33:01
     

    scooter, you're too funny :-)))
    now, i struggle to recompose my thoughts.

    -

    john, great visual, i'll try again later.

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