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Responses to the haiku for 28 February 2008 by John Stone

1.  
   Bill Kenney
   2008-02-28 06:43:47
    

   I disagree with your premise. The greatest challenge is excellence, as difficult to achieve in three lines as in one. But it's a challenge you've met. Good work.

2.  
   John Stone (Stonetalker at musician dot org)
   2008-02-28 07:33:40
    

   Thank you very much, Bill...

3.  
   Penelope
   2008-02-28 08:22:56
    

   fading sunlight mirrors blues bar

4.  
   josh wikoff
   2008-02-28 08:27:50
    

   Johnny,
   
   Here's a case where a haiku with three images works well for me. Three strong images, to be sure, but they compliment rather than overpower each other.
   
   I think I'd prefer this poem in 3 lines for the pivot:
   
   midday moon
   against the fence
   yellow grass
   
   Nice one, amigo!

5.  
   Scooter Lady
   2008-02-28 09:16:04
    

   moon against fence a dimpled ass

6.  
   Pen Again
   2008-02-28 09:19:47
    

   open window speeding moon shot

7.  
   Jen
   2008-02-28 12:23:18
    

   The more I read this one, the more I like it. Good haiku!

8.  
   judith ingram (super dot ingram at verizon dot net)
   2008-02-28 22:17:23
    

   I, too, think this lovely haiku would be well served in three lines. Perhaps, that is being arbitrary. Much of life is.
   
   Full moon,
   a golden trellis up
   from the sea.

9.  
   H. Gene Murtha
   2008-02-29 04:28:30
    

   well done as either a three line or a one-
   line haiku John.

10.  
    Alan Summers
    2008-02-29 10:51:57
     

    I'm enjoying the layers in this one! ;-)

11.  
    b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2008-03-07 20:33:01
     

    scooter, you're too funny :-)))
    now, i struggle to recompose my thoughts.
    
    -
    
    john, great visual, i'll try again later.

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