lightning so bright
   streetlights
     stutter

—ayaz daryl nielsen
        

About the author: ayaz daryl nielsen's poems have many homes, including HazMat, Edgz, Modern Haiku and Tertulia Magazine. He is editor of bear creek haiku.

 

Responses to the haiku for 18 March 2008 by ayaz daryl nielsen

  1.  
    Alan Summers
    2008-03-18 05:05:59
     

    I enjoyed this, very different, very atmospheric.

  2.  
    Penelope
    2008-03-18 06:30:58
     

    Striking!

  3.  
    Bill Kenney
    2008-03-18 08:00:13
     

    A strong visual haiku, with a vivid sound track as well.

  4.  
    terrytip
    2008-03-18 09:33:31
     

    knocking at the door
    rumble of thunder
    in the distance

  5.  
    ayaz
    2008-03-18 09:48:17
     

    wow, i really appreciate ayaz daryl nielsen's haiku (as i do most all of tinywords choices)! party on, dude! -
    ayaz daryl nielsen

  6.  
    judith ingram (super dot ingram at verizon dot net)
    2008-03-18 09:51:26
     

    Marvelous haiku ! The word "stutter" does it for me.

  7.  
    helen
    2008-03-18 11:46:32
     

    I can't wait til I'm outdoors on one of those nights. - Helen

  8.  
    b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2008-03-18 13:13:35
     

    ayaz, it happens.
    from the land of "lightning capital of the world", i've seen strikes causing mere mortals to stutter, along with taking ones breath away; even on a clear sunny day. for the (haikuist), your searing words conjure up that, all too familiar, statuesque awe.

    -

    lightning
    this instant eternity--
    less i forget there is a GOD

  9.  
    Briar
    2008-03-18 13:42:05
     

    nice poem, my long time friend

  10.  
    toby evans
    2008-03-18 14:14:06
     

    what is the mailing address of bear creek haiku? i've never heard of it, & would
    like to send some poems.

    your haiku is real good ayaz.

    toby

  11.  
    Mandi Hagler
    2008-03-18 14:22:55
     

    Interesting. It sparks thoughts and curosity.

  12.  
    Judith Partin (hdanalyst at earthlink dot net)
    2008-03-18 17:07:57
     

    I like it a lot. I re-experienced wonderful storms while reading it--ah yes! the purpose of poetry some would say.

  13.  
    Bill Zimmer
    2008-03-19 03:38:13
     

    ayaz,

    I loved your inference of the storm's power and how it effected the area..."the street lights stuttered..."

    Trees and signs flocked white
    While hard lakes thaw for Summer.
    Merging of seasons

  14.  
    Theresa Healani
    2008-03-19 03:39:08
     

    Weather's amazing. I wasn't aware you were a poet. Mahalo for sharing!

  15.  
    Alan Summers
    2008-03-19 03:59:16
     

    Hi Toby,

    Bear Creek haiku:
    www.geocities.com/coloradopoets/bearcreekhaiku.html

  16.  
    Frances Ruth Harris (harrisfr at yahoo dot com)
    2008-03-19 05:47:21
     

    So very fine!
    Thank you!

  17.  
    ayaz daryl nielsen
    2008-03-19 11:38:08
     

    toby, and just bear creek haiku will also take you to an online site - SASE, poetry of 15 lines or less, always seeking poetry for consideration, about 6 issues a year

  18.  
    2008-03-19 14:17:06
     

    My compliments, it is fine!
    good luck!

  19.  
    ayaz
    2008-04-16 16:54:58
     

    cool beans

  20.  
    ed markowski
    2008-12-26 07:21:32
     

    daryl,
    miss getting bch. is it still happening?
    hope you & yours are well & thriving.
    will send a submission soon.would have sent this via email but i have no idea what your email address is.
    ed

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