first sun in days
bees bees bees
in the rosemary

—gK

About the author: gK is a member of the Southern California Haiku Study Group. Besides writing haiku, senryu, and tanka, gK also writes science fiction haiku (also known as scifaiku), and is a moderator for the scifaiku mailing list at Yahoo! Groups.

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Responses to the haiku for 6 May 2008 by gK

  1.  
    shirley weese
    2008-05-06 08:02:15
     

    Love this!!! Yesterday was the first sunny day in ages and there were hummingbirds in my rosemary. I can SO relate to this haiku. Thank you!

    sweese

  2.  
    Magyar
    2008-05-06 10:16:25
     

    Nicely visual, GK !

    late day sun
    bees discover this mint...
    empty teacup
    _m

  3.  
    Angelika Wienert
    2008-05-06 11:29:45
     

    i like the repetition in line 2 very much!

  4.  
    Kujtim Agalliu
    2008-05-06 15:23:07
     

    day fades slowly...
    the wings of birds
    awake the silence.

    Kujtim

  5.  
    Alan Summers
    2008-05-06 17:00:06
     

    Nice touch of humour! ;-)

  6.  
    Bill Kenney
    2008-05-06 18:18:10
     

    That second line is brilliant.

  7.  
    b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2008-05-08 19:27:00
     

    rain ends
    bees come out
    as soon as it begins

  8.  
    gK
    2008-05-15 00:59:02
     

    Thank you everyone for your comments.

    Although I enjoyed the fairly large rosemary bush near my office, it grew pretty fast. When new owners purchased the property last year, they dug the rosemary up. There aren't near as many bees visiting the gazanias. :-(

    What made me fond of this particular haiku is the onomatopoetic nature of the second line caused by the repetition of the word 'bees'.

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