my son and i counting fireflies counting stars —Roberta Beary
Publication credits: the thin curve: The Red Moon Anthology of English-Language Haiku 1999 (Red Moon Press, 2000)
1st Place, Penumbra Haiku Contest 1999
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I love the haiku (of course), but haven't events moved on!
Roberta's collection was shortlisted
for the Poetry Society of America's
"Williams Carlos Williams Award!"
fka link: http://blogs.law.harvard.edu/ethicalesq/2008/04/22/psa-honors-haiku-roberta-bearys-the-unworn-necklace/
Congratulations again Roberta!!! ;-)
fireflies
winking out_
extinguished galaxies
starry night the darkness between fireflies
[Published in Acorn]
I love your stars and fireflies, Roberta.
brown out--
a firefly
gets into our room
Melchor F. Cichon
Beautiful haiku. First You count something, what is near You, something countable - then You start to count something further - endless and eternal. Great haiku about growing up and seeing more and more together.
A moment you'll both remember...
thanks so much for sharing it with us!
moments that are breeding a constant assurance of counting on each other - whenever, whatever, whereever. Words well-written.
This is a fun haiku that reminded me of a camping trip, long ago. Please excuse my use of your work!
My kids and I count
Fireflies or shooting stars,
We're not sure which.
my daughter's late night phone call...
the rumbling of thunder
-
...and over the years, i continue to soothe her fears
I enjoyed it very much to read this haiku!
Here, here Alan - congratulations Roberta! Your work is consistently distinctive and beautiful - always a joy to read, and well worthy of the recognition.
Many thanks to all for your comments. My son was almost 11 when I wrote this haiku; he will turn 20 later this summer. I am lucky that every so often we still count fireflies.
Alan and Helen, thanks for your congratulations on the PSA's William Carlos Williams finalist award for "The Unworn Necklace" which I am happy to say includes this haiku.
twin girls_
in their crib, telling secrets
out loud!
bare feet patter
across this dampened grass
the child laughs
> and that -child- could be in us -all- <
_m
Is tinywords now going away?
tiny words
briefly glimmers bright
stalls in summer's light
>Continue the renga; the flowers that bloom in the dark.<
night blooms
these moonflies gather
a new day
_m
_m, your words remind me of those i've shared with that special lady...
pure rose
in full bloom--
rivals this driven snow
&
porcelain flower-
this summer night
your heady fragrance
-
what one does with tiny words, beneath the moonrise in summer(winter, down under)
'lo Bob; on and on, and on.
first light...
in scents of pine and lilac
this rose awakens
_m
Äî ñâèäàíèÿ, auf wiedersehen, tot ziens, farvel, hejdá, au revoir, adios, arrivederci, lehitraot, adios, kwa heri, adeus, sayonara, itte kimasu, itte irasshai, shubho bidai, nomoskaar, rabb raakhaa, bandagi, salóm, khoda hafez, ta-ta, abar dyakha habe, namasté...
-
magyar, these nights, i simply say "until"...
-
last light...
this half-closed red rose
her silhouette remains
The abundance of 'so-longs' seems ominous.
moonlight breeze...
this rose silhouette
in shadow's dance
> until <
_m
For anyone having withdrawal symptoms, there's another great daily haiku site @ tobaccoroadpoet dot com. Also check out the blog's "three questions".
magyar, "so long" does have this inauspicious presage; repressed until the dawning of dusk, once more...
-
this light fades with dawn
beneath the drooping leaf...
firefly in repose
-
ahhh, jennifer c, these are the times within tinywords absence, thoughts become symbiotic to (tiny steps); withdrawal symptoms, far from it.
this scene would make a nice lead in to a country time lemonade commercial, it's
quaint & anachronistic.
wink,
your words exposed yatsuka ishihara's views on the haiku; at least one in particular, "anachronistic"(anachronism). these days, i ponder how many students, even masters of the haiku(hokku) & etc, clearly understand the "anachronistic haiku"....
;-)
bob,
good to see you saw the upside of my comment.
was a bit concerned that it might be taken as a closet insult which it was never intended to be.
that being said however, i do find it to be unbelievably quaint that in this age of game boys & i pods a mother & son would actually count fireflies...
satellite dish
we haven't seen the stars
in months
wink
also, for anyone who might not already know, Roberta's work is being highlighted on the Mann library's daily haiku site for July. check it out @ haiku dot mannlib dot cornell dot edu
p.s. nice one wink!
firefly
along my path
alone
-
wink, more of an enlightenment; what many overlooked, or may not have been aware of, you provided this deeper read to roberta's haiku
cultural & philosophical movements of the 17th & 18th centuries(enlightenment age) sprang to mind
-
cicada
accompanying the star-spangled banner--
directv
for some, dishnet, cable, even rabbit ears...
fireflys
this soft nights rain
pfsst pfsst pfsst
_m
I really like your haiku magyar!
Gorgeous use of sound in the third line which feels like a pivot line as well. Very well crafted.
Just needs 'de-typoing'
fireflies
this soft night's rain
pfsst pfsst pfsst
You should send it to Tinywords submissions! ;-)
fireflys
this soft nights rain
pfsst pfsst pfsst
_
magyar, i see the purpose and reasoning behind "fireflys, and nights".
even:
fireflysss
this soft nightsss rain
pfsst pfsst pfsst
would have worked for me
-
artistic license allowsss one thisss latitude, the ignoring of the conventional; ssspecially in grammar...
_Ahhhh yes, Alan and Bob, the -S- just flies to the end of fly, and the missing punctuation is quite simply, missing.
_I am truly honored by your kind comments, and to you both... I offer my appreciation.
_m
magyar,
yet, another representation of "_m", modesty; these days, a rare and fleeting attribute. _m, continue your quality writes.
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fireflies winking
this summer eve...
in the midst of sparkling stars
one more blink *
and then it winks out__
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