This is really great, Karen. Ruefully yet wittily observed, rather like classic haiku by Issa.
I also note a clever structural effect, with the 2 syllables, 4 syllables, 5 syllables construction building a pyramidal shaped verse – rather like a termite mound.
Really enjoyable poetry. Thanks for sharing it.
September 8th, 2015 at 8:43 am
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September 8th, 2015 at 11:59 am
Ouch! Good one, Karen.
marion
September 8th, 2015 at 3:00 pm
This is really great, Karen. Ruefully yet wittily observed, rather like classic haiku by Issa.
I also note a clever structural effect, with the 2 syllables, 4 syllables, 5 syllables construction building a pyramidal shaped verse – rather like a termite mound.
Really enjoyable poetry. Thanks for sharing it.
Strider
September 11th, 2015 at 9:20 pm
lingering heat
a spiral of termites
aims at azure
(first published in a Haiku World Kukai, 2013)
November 4th, 2015 at 8:36 pm
right on