overcast sky
the census taker asks
if I live alone


9 Responses

  1. Garry Eaton Says:

    Ominous evocation of the one and the many.

  2. Alan Summers Says:

    .
    overcast sky
    the census taker asks
    if I live alone

    —JOANNE MORCOM

    Just like background music can make a neutral set (room, street etc…) go from funny, romantic, to tease and scary, so does the opening line. In my childhood hometown of Bristol we had a guy called John Cannan always presentable and with a smart suit who was responsible for many crimes and received three life sentences. I remember searching for him too. So it makes me wonder if it was just an innocent question important for the census, or was he gathering his own information too?

    Deeply unnerving haikai verse, and of course I wonder if it's penned to test the reader and their attitude. A finely craft poem and incredibly thought provoking.

    Alan

  3. Jim Says:

    Wonderful!

  4. Joanne Morcom Says:

    Thank you for your responses.
    Alan, your story about nasty John is unsettling!
    Yes, I was trying to write a haiku with a Hitchcock-like undertone, and hopefully I achieved it.

    Cheers,
    Joanne

  5. Alan Summers Says:

    You did, very successfully! :-)

    warmest regards,
    Alan

  6. Robert Kingston Says:

    Caught out by the simplicity, it took until the third knock (reading) for Joanne’s wonderful haiku to hit home. Alan’s insightful gatherings added to,by Joanne revealing the poems intent made for a trilogy of attacks on the senses.
    Nicely done Joanne.
    .
    my god in Hitchcock
    is it just ?
    people don’t see

  7. Mojde Says:

    Nice

    state of lonesome
    makes an opportunity…

  8. janewilliams Says:

    Terrific! And I agree it rewards with rereads.

  9. John Potts Says:

    small fog
    in my hand
    a snowflake melts

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