crowded sidewalk
briefly
part of a family

 


9 Responses

  1. peggybilbro Says:

    This poem feels so cozy!

  2. Alan Summers Says:

    .
    crowded sidewalk
    briefly
    part of a family

    —LAURIE GREER

    I read this, or can read this, as deeply poignant, and also hopefully as something not sad, as if the hustle and bustle of both sidewalk and the family energy have, for a moment, taken charge of a random stranger! :-)

    I'd like to stay with the happier notion, but that word 'briefly' speaks volume otherwise.

    I can only hope it was a happy amusing incident, and not about a past loss of personal family.

    Wonderfully crafted and captured haikai verse, beautifully worded.

    warm regards,

    Alan

  3. Laurie Greer Says:

    Alan–
    thank you for your kind words and sensitive reading(s). I guess the actual experience had something bittersweet about it. But anything that can deliver a haiku on the spot, as this brief moment did, redeems the negatives and fills me with joy and satisfaction.
    So happy it can speak to others, too.

  4. Alan Summers Says:

    Thanks Laurie. It's a brilliant haiku, and there is often something bittersweet in certain moments.

    warmest regards,
    Alan

  5. Ed Bremson Says:

    I love this poem. You have captured a situation that occurs to me often. I take my daily walks in the shopping mall, and it's not unusual for me to find myself temporarily part of a group. You captured it perfectly.

  6. Mojde Says:

    Great…

    society starts when
    a slight connection
    is made,
    like
    a voice
    passing through
    a wall
    heard by
    an unknown ear …
    it
    demands for
    obedience of rules…
    abide by the side walk rule
    and abide in the side walk
    protecting
    limits …

  7. sanjuktaa Says:

    It's easy to relate to this. Lovely haiku! Thanks for sharing, Laurie Greer.

  8. Joanne Morcom Says:

    We're all members of the human family!

  9. Laurie Greer Says:

    Thank you, all who commented. So glad the poem resonated!

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