a snail inches along
a mobil home ...
"no parking" sign on the lawn
levon machenry
2005-09-11 16:36:30
miss lyles,your haiku are what i would expect
from a gentrified southern lady. very well
written, but lacking bite. you're also very
good with all of the well worn haiku cliches'such as "luna moth" etc. readers digest is calling
you.
city heat
the radio and radiator
missing from my car
b.m.r.
2008-12-08 16:51:54
cooler, darker this dawn--
cup of black coffee
2nd day brewing
a snail inches along
a mobil home ...
"no parking" sign on the lawn
miss lyles,your haiku are what i would expect
from a gentrified southern lady. very well
written, but lacking bite. you're also very
good with all of the well worn haiku cliches'such as "luna moth" etc. readers digest is calling
you.
city heat
the radio and radiator
missing from my car
cooler, darker this dawn--
cup of black coffee
2nd day brewing