snow brighter than the day moon between the caribou

—Martin Gottlieb Cohen

Originally published on Asahi Haikuist Network

About the author: Martin Cohen was born in the South Bronx somewhere on Simpson Street, went to a Yeshiva on East Broadway and Canal Street, and then lived in the South of Brooklyn, the South of Long Island, The Southern Tier of Upstate New York, The South of Manhattan, and finally South Jersey in Egg Harbor.

Martin's e-mail address: martin1223 at comcast dot net

Martin also has a weblog.

Responses to the haiku for 1 February 2007 by Martin Gottlieb Cohen

    b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2007-02-01 22:43:57

    martin, i'm mindful somewhat of the winter nights ever brighter than the grey drab winter days; my childhood in pennsylvania.


    nightly crossing
    moonlit snow
    field mouse tracks--
    akin to my own

    2007-02-02 07:31:36

    I've read this many, many times, and like it more each time.

    Alan Summers
    2007-02-02 09:54:59

    An absolute delight to read out loud to myself in private.

    It's also a great performance haiku too!

    2007-02-03 14:57:19

    Hi Martin,
    this is a fascinating combination...
    I'm drawn to the images...and the wilderness atmosphere.
    And congrats on your haiku in the new Roadrunner!

    2007-02-05 08:06:00

    Thanks everyone!

    I prefer to read it silently. I wrote this a couple of years back and got the image from a PBS "Nature" film. So my sketch is from the filmmakers perspective and therefore secondhand. I suppose this is plagiaristic...what do you think?

    d. f. tweney (dylan at tinywords dot com)
    2007-02-06 15:55:39

    Martin, your haiku sketch is no more plagiarizing PBS than Shakespeare was plagiarizing Ovid... every artist takes inspiration from nature and from other art!

    the artist
    staring at the young man
    in his self-portrait

    2007-02-06 21:53:37

    Martin, if you were inspired by what you
    saw in a nature film, surely that qualifies
    as a haiku moment?
    Who knows what the old masters might
    have written about if movies, tv
    and the internet had appeared in
    their lifetimes...!

    2007-02-07 06:53:46

    Forgive me; I'm simple. Arenít I experiencing the filmmakerís perspective instead of seeing the moment for myself? Isn't direct experience the best way to sketch?

    2007-02-07 19:12:34

    Hmmmm....I see what you mean, Martin...
    in a way. But if the photographer has
    not manipulated the image, isn't it still
    the truth?
    I agree that direct experience is the best,
    but I don't think it's the only way.
    When we write haiku to go with photos
    on the web, we're inspired by that photo...
    and this seems to be an accepted practice.

    b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2007-02-08 04:02:06

    martin, i appreciate your afterthoughts.

    pbs captured the moment, but you share in the moment.
    this new age gives many the opportunity to experience things they might have missed out on.
    loneliness doesn't dictate to the haiku; nor discovery of the moment while being alone.

    the haiku needs new directions; away from that worn path today's writers naively imitate...

    martin, thanks