summer twilight:
licking the line between 
chocolate and vanilla 


—Tracy Koretsky

1st Place, Mississippi Valley Poetry Contest, 2006

About the author: Tracy Koretsky: tracykoretsky at mindspring dot com

13 responses
published 12 June 2007
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Responses to the haiku for 12 June 2007 by Tracy Koretsky

  1.  
    Alan Summers
    2007-06-12 03:43:00
     

    It's great to see such a well-crafted ice-cream haiku: that "licking the line" is a very effective start to the second line, with a well chosen end word "between".

    By having twilight instead of a summer afternoon, you have also added an extra depth, and layers.

    And to end it all, it's just a darn good short poem!

  2.  
    Gosia Zamorska
    2007-06-12 05:00:42
     

    Great haiku!
    It will stay with me.

  3.  
    Patricia (a/k/a Roswila) (maryschild44 at yahoo dot com)
    2007-06-12 09:25:15
     

    Delightful and wonderfully written! Thanks for the double treat. :-)

  4.  
    kala ramesh
    2007-06-12 09:59:36
     

    Hi Tracy,

    What a delightful little poem you've crafted!
    Great work!

    _kala

  5.  
    Yvonne
    2007-06-12 10:07:04
     

    All I can say is I wish I had written it. What a great poem!! And just yesterday I purchase chocolate/vanilla swirl frozen yogart. Again, a great poem!

    Yvonne

  6.  
    Angelika Wienert
    2007-06-12 11:13:38
     

    yeah, a very good haiku!

    a haiku full of taste!
    taste of chocolate and vanilla...
    taste of the moment!

  7.  
    Ed Schwellenbach
    2007-06-12 11:29:17
     

    Absolutely delicious! But who said anything about ice cream?

    I, too, feel that it is extremely well written and wish that I had written it.

  8.  
    Hannah Quinn
    2007-06-12 16:11:33
     

    Congratulations on a terrific achievement in such a short piece. A true rendition of what haiku is all about. Wonderful emotion and exquisite imagery! Brilliant.
    Hannah

  9.  
    Bill Kenney
    2007-06-12 16:19:13
     

    Ah, yes, I remember it well.

  10.  
    pat boutilier (ridinghhood at writing dot com)
    2007-06-13 16:17:21
     

    Such a lovely, lyrical haiku---the imagery is so fresh and evocative.

  11.  
    laryalee
    2007-06-14 22:46:30
     

    Hi Tracy,
    this is a wonderful moment --
    congrats on your win!

  12.  
    b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2007-06-18 16:11:37
     

    twilight-
    thirsting memories
    quenched by spring rain

  13.  
    michele
    2007-06-20 08:52:23
     

    Haha! Yummy little Ku, well suited to the season. Thanks Tracy! michele

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