the visible pulse
of a baby's soft spot . . .
wren answering wren
—Ferris Gilli
About the author: Ferris Gilli lives in North Georgia. Her work in haiku and related forms has won numerous awards. Ms. Gilli is an Associate Editor of the quarterly journal The Heron's Nest.
I admire very much your poem, the subtle juxtaposition between the inaudible, fragile but tenacious pulse of the baby's fontanel and the call of the wren, not chirps but harsh sounds.
Thank you.
So sweet. (And wonder-filled to be reminded of such tenderness on this 7th anniversary of the World Trade Center terrorist attack here in New York city.)
laryalee
2007-09-11 19:54:22
Ferris, how nice to see you here!
And a lovely example of the juxtaposition
you do so well.
I get a feeling that the wrens might be sharing
the joy of this new life...perhaps awaiting their
own arrivals. I even glimpse the pulse of a wren's
throat as it sings...
:)
Lary
Magyar
2007-09-12 07:06:19
Ferris,
_Some words I dislike due to their over use, but of YOUR heartful lines -symbiosis- overcame my aversion. _Of many things... we do not know.
wren answers wren
in rhythm with the heart
a message
_M
Very effective juxtaposition, and I love the softness of "wren to wren" in camparison to its harsh call.
I hope we can see more of your work on tinywords! ;-)
Lorin Ford
2007-09-17 16:50:32
Hi Ferris...Very nicely done! The fontanelle spot pulse 'answered' by the very pulse of life... represented by 'wren answering wren'.
I admire the way the particularities here guide me to something mysterious and essential about the continuity of life itself, which underlies all its forms.
lorin
b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
2007-09-21 08:14:58
night chill
covering my fontanel--
a mockingbird warbles
Very interesting.
I admire very much your poem, the subtle juxtaposition between the inaudible, fragile but tenacious pulse of the baby's fontanel and the call of the wren, not chirps but harsh sounds.
Thank you.
lovely, ferris!
this one touched my soft spot...
welcome to tinywords
So sweet. (And wonder-filled to be reminded of such tenderness on this 7th anniversary of the World Trade Center terrorist attack here in New York city.)
Ferris, how nice to see you here!
And a lovely example of the juxtaposition
you do so well.
I get a feeling that the wrens might be sharing
the joy of this new life...perhaps awaiting their
own arrivals. I even glimpse the pulse of a wren's
throat as it sings...
:)
Lary
Ferris,
_Some words I dislike due to their over use, but of YOUR heartful lines -symbiosis- overcame my aversion. _Of many things... we do not know.
wren answers wren
in rhythm with the heart
a message
_M
Very effective juxtaposition, and I love the softness of "wren to wren" in camparison to its harsh call.
I hope we can see more of your work on tinywords! ;-)
Hi Ferris...Very nicely done! The fontanelle spot pulse 'answered' by the very pulse of life... represented by 'wren answering wren'.
I admire the way the particularities here guide me to something mysterious and essential about the continuity of life itself, which underlies all its forms.
lorin
night chill
covering my fontanel--
a mockingbird warbles