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Responses to the haiku for 19 October 2007 by Robert Castagna

1.  
   Mixx
   2007-10-19 05:53:14
    

   Moody autumn so well expressed!

2.  
   mike farley
   2007-10-19 08:02:42
    

   dusk
   a crow flies low
   out of the barn

3.  
   jc
   2007-10-19 10:23:58
    

   I've been trying to find the right words to express something similar. Well done. Don't worry; I won't steal it. ;)

4.  
   DarKmr
   2007-10-19 13:10:37
    

   Robert, I like the sensation you've shown, and I'll add:
   
   panes rattle...
   above the wind
   a tea kettle shrieks

5.  
   Bill Kenney
   2007-10-19 13:29:55
    

   I'm not quite sure where I am in this one. I mean this as praise. Offbeat and haunting.

6.  
   b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
   2007-10-20 10:20:59
    

   autumn eve-
   being the ant
   harvesting honeydew secretion

7.  
   judith Ingram
   2007-10-20 14:34:36
    

   A good autumn tell-tale, Robert. I know that cold rattle.
   
   The sound of the autumn wind
   is the harbinger. Close the window.
   Hold me.

8.  
   gK
   2007-10-21 01:33:19
    

   Interesting, but I keep wanting to read it as:
   
   at dusk—the autumn wind from behind closed windows

9.  
   b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
   2007-10-22 13:52:52
    

   i'd fought the ku being a tad misleading. "behind" brings to mind, the wind opposite the front side of the closed windows(inside). hahaha
   with this conception, a fulfilment of the methodic haiku; speak of the false(truth) as though it's true(false)
   
   yet, i fear this not being the author's intent
   -
   
   (keeping with the author's words)
   
   closed windows--
   at dusk
   the autumn wind

10.  
    DarKmr
    2007-10-22 16:46:07
     

    _But, as a visitor in that cafe "one can easily see life beyond the cafe windows..." as Robert had written.
    _Isn't it relative? If you wear a mask a face is behind the mask; when looking at a mask being worn... is it not true that a face is behind the mask?
    
    through the window
    this cat watches the mouse
    a closed door
    
    *Where is the cat? Where is the mouse?*
    
    Good haibun, Robert! _M

11.  
    b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2007-10-23 13:06:34
     

    ahhh _m
    relative nor abstract, nor in anything we understand is there a true absolute; mere degrees of truths and falsehoods.
    is there a face behind the mask, conceivable; but, too often the face is the mask, and vice versa.
    when saying "isn't it", no, it isn't.
    
    question raised, where is the cat, there; and where is the mouse, over there; be they alive, dead, a dream, or in-between. ;-)

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