at dusk
    the autumn wind behind
               closed windows

—Robert Castagna
        

Excerpted from a haibun I wrote called "Cafe Haibun," which was published in March 2007 in Contemporary Haibun Online.

About the author: Robert Castagna is a photographer in the Boston area. His website is www.robertcastagna.com.

Responses to the haiku for 19 October 2007 by Robert Castagna

  1.  
    Mixx
    2007-10-19 05:53:14
     

    Moody autumn so well expressed!

  2.  
    mike farley
    2007-10-19 08:02:42
     

    dusk
    a crow flies low
    out of the barn

  3.  
    jc
    2007-10-19 10:23:58
     

    I've been trying to find the right words to express something similar. Well done. Don't worry; I won't steal it. ;)

  4.  
    DarKmr
    2007-10-19 13:10:37
     

    Robert, I like the sensation you've shown, and I'll add:

    panes rattle...
    above the wind
    a tea kettle shrieks

  5.  
    Bill Kenney
    2007-10-19 13:29:55
     

    I'm not quite sure where I am in this one. I mean this as praise. Offbeat and haunting.

  6.  
    b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2007-10-20 10:20:59
     

    autumn eve-
    being the ant
    harvesting honeydew secretion

  7.  
    judith Ingram
    2007-10-20 14:34:36
     

    A good autumn tell-tale, Robert. I know that cold rattle.

    The sound of the autumn wind
    is the harbinger. Close the window.
    Hold me.

  8.  
    gK
    2007-10-21 01:33:19
     

    Interesting, but I keep wanting to read it as:

    at dusk—the autumn wind from behind closed windows

  9.  
    b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2007-10-22 13:52:52
     

    i'd fought the ku being a tad misleading. "behind" brings to mind, the wind opposite the front side of the closed windows(inside). hahaha
    with this conception, a fulfilment of the methodic haiku; speak of the false(truth) as though it's true(false)

    yet, i fear this not being the author's intent
    -

    (keeping with the author's words)

    closed windows--
    at dusk
    the autumn wind

  10.  
    DarKmr
    2007-10-22 16:46:07
     

    _But, as a visitor in that cafe "one can easily see life beyond the cafe windows..." as Robert had written.
    _Isn't it relative? If you wear a mask a face is behind the mask; when looking at a mask being worn... is it not true that a face is behind the mask?

    through the window
    this cat watches the mouse
    a closed door

    *Where is the cat? Where is the mouse?*

    Good haibun, Robert! _M

  11.  
    b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2007-10-23 13:06:34
     

    ahhh _m
    relative nor abstract, nor in anything we understand is there a true absolute; mere degrees of truths and falsehoods.
    is there a face behind the mask, conceivable; but, too often the face is the mask, and vice versa.
    when saying "isn't it", no, it isn't.

    question raised, where is the cat, there; and where is the mouse, over there; be they alive, dead, a dream, or in-between. ;-)

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