small town where I grew up
a rusty penny on the tracks

10 Responses

  1. Garry Says:

    Wartime supply requirements apparently mandated the use of iron or steel for 'coppers.' Hence the rust, I guess.

    I like the touch of wabi sabi in this one.

    its name painted out
    the ghost town
    water tower

  2. Lisa Chavez Says:

    Excellent! Simple, and such a picture either way you imagine it. Well done, Vincent.

  3. MaryJo Says:

    I like the simplicity of your haiku. Thank you.

  4. Alan Summers Says:

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    small town where I grew up
    a rusty penny on the tracks

    —VINCENT TRIPI

    .

    So many favourites including:

    With me the same cloud out of the covered bridge

    The Haiku Anthology ed. Cor van den Heuvel

    A new one from the theme of a small town, and Vincent Tripi's book "small town" tribe press 2003

    Wonderful!

  5. haikuapprentice Says:

    Wow, what a vivid image combined with such a powerful metaphor. I agree with Garry – hometown poetry is such a source of wabi sabi – from the days of Basho. My own reflection:

    homecoming
    my mother and this old house
    shrunken by the years

    Strider

  6. hammerandtongs Says:

    Beautiful. Both thought and the language it is dressed in.

  7. martin1223 Says:

    His poem is double plus good!

    river playground
    a tugboat echoes the night

  8. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    Nostalgic. I like how you move from the townscape and zoom into the penny on the tracks.

    marion

  9. hammerandtongs Says:

    Such nostalgia. "a rusty penny on the tracks" brings back memories of the small town where the poet grew up.

  10. Ellen Grace Olinger Says:

    wonderful poem

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