shoveling snow, and singing a Don Ho song under my breath Published by J. D. Heskin J.D. Heskin Duluth, MN Blueforks at aol.com View all posts by J. D. Heskin
jd, nice piece of work here, but i think it might read better this way… shoveling snow i sing a don ho song under my breath it might be even better if you used a song title as in this example… shoveling snow i whistle “dixie” under my breath just a few suggestions to improve an already fine haiku Reply
sand on my shoes
the ac comes on…
caroling from beyond the lawn
jd,
nice piece of work here, but i think it might
read better this way…
shoveling snow
i sing a don ho song
under my breath
it might be even better if you used a song title
as in this example…
shoveling snow
i whistle “dixie”
under my breath
just a few suggestions to improve an already fine
haiku
leaf, end of season
waivering accidental in the breeze
just me