reminds me of the old concentration gameshow.
to really learn this craft, find a newspaper
game called “say what you see.” clever?
perhaps. genius? no. there is nothing new
about this type of approach.
In my enthusiasm about the minimal form (new to me), I neglected to mention, in my first response, the artistry & insight of “hiddenemyself” — admirable!
Wonderful! I think this transcends the haiku form into what should be called Sudden Haiku.
(I hate to do this, but someone really should, in case others don’t get it. Explaining it doesn’t really ruin it if you don’t get it in the first place. The art of this poem is that it is crafted from three words: “hidden enemy myself”)
in reading an elizabeth st jacques’ article,
i again encountered basho’s much read
“old pond
a frog leaps in
water’s sound”
does it get any better than this
elizabeth presents a piece by emily romano’s,
“hibiscushionswallowtail”
can’t you feel the moment; and acceptable haiku definitives
I enjoyed your haiku even more than Cor’s “tundra” (-;
I can see that you would need “hidden” rather than “hide” to make it work so well.
It must have been a joy to have the great Bob Spiess accept your work, and I bet he sent you a nice note too.
Thank you, and look forward to seeing more of your work.
what means this e between hidden and myself?
Really clever. I love the “nesting” of the words inside one another. Or I might call it “nestling”!
Thanks!
More than clever, Martin.
Minimal haiku
Maximal genius
Yes! Thank you! More! More! More!
It is interesting. In my country there is the poem into one line. Since 1936. However, it has a caesura, like this reply for the Martin’s text:
Flower out of sight: soul of woman
HighIQ
Haiku
reminds me of the old concentration gameshow.
to really learn this craft, find a newspaper
game called “say what you see.” clever?
perhaps. genius? no. there is nothing new
about this type of approach.
doggodpeeseepsonnobob
innitheehtmirrorrorrim
In my enthusiasm about the minimal form (new to me), I neglected to mention, in my first response, the artistry & insight of “hiddenemyself” — admirable!
Nothing whatsoever
about this pseudo-haiku…
Poetic song or silence?
Dad,
You make us proud!
oneweloveu
Wonderful! I think this transcends the haiku form into what should be called Sudden Haiku.
(I hate to do this, but someone really should, in case others don’t get it. Explaining it doesn’t really ruin it if you don’t get it in the first place. The art of this poem is that it is crafted from three words: “hidden enemy myself”)
in reading an elizabeth st jacques’ article,
i again encountered basho’s much read
“old pond
a frog leaps in
water’s sound”
does it get any better than this
elizabeth presents a piece by emily romano’s,
“hibiscushionswallowtail”
can’t you feel the moment; and acceptable haiku definitives
martin, rather mystical; but something seems lost
humidawnecksaffronstigma…
This is closer to a jigsawpuzzle than it is a haiku.. i did enjoy it though :)(:
Thanks jerel for answering Angelika’s question.
In response to some of the questions, I can highly recommend:
The Nick of Time:
Essays on Haiku Aesthetics
by Paul O. Williams
Press Here, 2001. ISBN 1-878798-23-5
Further details at:
http://www.haikuworld.org/books/nickoftime.html
existigmartyrannympholepsylph…